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A Wake up Call |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
After all the times you hurt me The times you made me cry Why do I forgive you, with every little sigh? You look in my eyes...I forgive you You place your hands upon me....I'm yours What qualities could you possibly possess that make my vision blur? You LIE again and again You CHEAT-not always, but every now and then You find nothing WRONG with the things that you do. Well baby, let me tell you I now SEE right through! I woke up today And I can now call you for what you truly are A NO GOOD, LYING, CHEATING MAN-W****!!!!!!!!!! [This message has been edited by Shygirl82 (edited 06-12-2001).] |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Whoa! I don't think that the person this one is addressed to will live for much longer, lol. Good job.  "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful and you should really give this poem fro the person youw rote about...i think he should know!...and are yous ure your a shygirl  ...hehehe but great job on writing this...quite protayed powerful emotions here  ...bye Nikki  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
holy crap. that end woke me up ....hey i may not need the coffee this morning. Boys can be so not nice.  |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
haha i loved it! esp. the end it was great! nice job and good luck with them guys! Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Awesome! This was really hardcore, you should definately show this person the poem. It will knock him on his ass! I totally relate to this one, because the girls can just as easily do it to the guys.Let's put it this way- to hell with everyone who treats people that way. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Thanks to everyone for replying...I dont really think this one of my best..but it definately made me feel better when I wrote it. And Keoni..I totally agree with what you said... Thanks everyone!!!  ~Nikki~ |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
Wonderful poem!!! The ending definately gave me a laugh! I, too, think you should give this jerk the poem. I love ya Nik and I'm always here for you! Chez *that what does not kill us makes us stronger!* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good vent out. I liked the poem, but do watch out with the W word It's a toughy around here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
As a man, I'm a bit scared . I would never lie so I guess I'm safe. Good poem way to slam the opposing side there."This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot |
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