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chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2001-06-04 04:40 PM

Wipe the tears from your eyes
Hide youself from all the lies
Block your ears from all the cries
And calm the storm inside.

Throw your cane and walk along
Find your voice and sing a song
Speak and never feel you're wrong
Pick up your feet and dance.

Open your eyes and catch your sight
Count the stars cast every night
Walk away from every fight
And learn to live that way.

Don't be afraid to live or die
Gaze at clouds up in the sky
Never wish that you could fly
Just smile at your neighbour.

Hug your friends, or hold their hands
Seek adventure in far off lands
Be that one who understands
And walk beyond the road.

Hold my hand and walk with me
Life awaits.

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 06-04-2001).]

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

1 posted 2001-06-04 05:05 PM

i really like this, but the last stanza kind set the rhythm different then the others. good anyway, nice job.

~

fall hard, practice harder not to fall

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-04 05:11 PM

Well done here....I loved the whole flow of the poem and I loved the scheme of it all, but your ending was a bit blah. I didn't like the last line. The whole poem had this beautiful feeling to it but the ending was kind of normal and unfelt. I don't know...you know what I'm saying?
Anyway, for the most part I loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

3 posted 2001-06-04 05:31 PM

Yeah, I know what ya mean javi.

Thanks!
I think i changed it though...

¤ ¢H@§ïÑg RåIñ ¤

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-06-04 06:03 PM

this is such a "feel good" poem! I like this very much

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-06-04 07:09 PM

Very inspirational Poem Leah
I love it a lot
Just something I needed to read
thanks for sharing
keep it up

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, and the rest of yous :)

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-06-08 06:10 PM

beautiful poem...i really likes this piece...the flow was nice...the ending...perfect

...bye Leah

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

PiXiEpUnKeR
Junior Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 49
IL, USA

7 posted 2001-06-08 06:51 PM

Never wish that you could fly

hmm... that doesn't really seem like it fits in this poem... you poem gives me a DO ALL kind of feeling and flying would really be doing it all... maybe you should try "never wish you could'nt fly?" Great poem otherwise!! Check some of my posts out! I love the comments!

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

8 posted 2001-06-11 11:06 PM

This was so beautifully written...i absolutely loved it

Great job on this...

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