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Poor Excluded Me
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Poor Excluded Me |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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Poor Excluded Me This year is over I can say it was the worst There was no kiss There was no first My resolution in shambles Neither loved nor lost Failure of me? I hold myself at this cost I never heard "yes" all year this went on I can't help but think Something in me is wrong Never her heart's choice My soul's been ripped apart My tears bleed this ink To reflect the bleeding of my heart I can only believe There is only one love for another Poor excluded me; forget me Think of me as just one other This shoreline beats for another I stand on my cliff and see The lovers low in their tents Never poor excluded me All the times when I lay sleepless; this rain Shattered another's silence Never reflecting my pain There is only one horizon Never meant for me to see Set for two perfect Not for poor excluded me I feel so regresseed I forget the rest It i can never start over I could never start over I was meant for one thing only To remain poor poor exluded me hopeless, and i cry because of it at the edge of tears sift the heavens will always drift for someone else "This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This is a wonderful poem I love it and for that it's going into my library. Until your next masterful work. Oh I know things will get better  -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
Wow this poem is awesome! It really hit home with me. I hope things get better for you. You won't always be poor excluded you. Because remember this to someone sitting alone there will always be another person somewhere moaning of their loneliness. Therefore, no one is really ever alone. Wonderful post! *that what does not kill us makes us stronger!* |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow! I loved this one! Amazing work here. I hope things get better for you! Your write beautifully. Keep posting!!!Go sell crazy some place else; we're all stocked up here. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
*hugs* I hope as well as everyone else that things get better for you. well, I don't just hope, I KNOW things will get better. just give it time. I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
excelent form and a great rhyme scheme. I really like this poem and I can really relate to it, don't worry life is a road and sometimes you get to hill that's always hard to go up but when you do go up and start going down it's oh so good. Don't worry bout this year and forget what's bothering you, nothing is wrong with you and you'll soon find who you seek then you'll know this is the one. keep posting  I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I didn't think this poem was as good as your others, BUT it did have a POWERFUL ending. I loved the ending. Very well thought out! Hope to see more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is an excellent write. I'm very impressed and actually in awe right now. I agree the ending did have a kick to it. keep it up my friend. keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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