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stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

0 posted 2001-06-10 04:26 AM

one last poem before I go to bed--this one's fer you Frac (written for you, not necessarily about you)
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A former image of myself
Broken and torn to shreds
I am older
I am wiser

I look in the mirror
I see my flaws
I know my mistakes
I know my regrets

My eyes seem so cold
as I stare in disinlusionment
I don't see myself
I see someone detached

My heart used to be free
and I used to love
but hurt closed the doors
And I became cold

then you came into my life
my heart is much lighter
my dark brown eyes sparkle
I once again am warm

you opened me up
and held me close
you also made me realise
how beautiful I truly am

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

[This message has been edited by stace_co2003 (edited 06-10-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-06-10 04:31 AM

Well done here stacy! Such a sweet poem! Made me go awwwwww....
I loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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2 posted 2001-06-10 05:30 PM

Great work Stace, I really enjoyed the read

Zu

"Death solves all problems, no man, no problem" J.V.Stalin 1918.

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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3 posted 2001-06-10 07:32 PM

this is really great! i think it's very well written. Keep posting

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

4 posted 2001-06-11 03:42 AM

Hm... Nice poem. I told you you don't necessarily have to be all technical when writing poetry. Nice job here. Perhaps I should return the favour sometime....

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Angelwings
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since 1999-08-27

Posts 222
IL, USA

5 posted 2001-06-11 03:51 AM

wonderful! I enjoyed this poem and look forward to reading more. And I'm with the others! AWWWW! hheheh

*that what does not kill us makes us stronger!*

*Everyone can deal with pain in their own way, some things are just harder than others!*

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

6 posted 2001-06-11 03:56 AM

This is REALLY GOOD....It was really sweet...
Until next time,
~Nikki~

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-06-11 04:12 AM

sweet poem...nice tribute...i liked it lots...how nice of you to write a poem for someone

...bye Stace

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

8 posted 2001-06-11 10:09 AM

lol...your little critique thing is alot like fractal's lol.

good work.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-06-11 10:12 AM

Beautiful dedication Stace. This is really good. Keep it up and keep sharing.

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