Teen Poetry #4 |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hi hi...i don't really like this poem i just wanted 2 post somethin. tell me what you think, and be honest. thanks! :-) sorrow overwhelms me as i gaze into your eyes i know it's over but i still can't help from asking why why don't u care that i'm sittin here lost? did you ever care? and for that matter why exactly did i? i knew you'd end up hurting me... scarring me on the inside but yet i let myself fall fall into your eyes the eyes of an angel angel in disguise the eyes of my life -fear- |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
scarring me on the inside.... i loved the imagery you used in this short but sufficently "sweet" poem..you may not like it but i think youve done an adequate enough job ini portraying your feeelings...well done!!..hope to read more from you soon!! bye bye bye!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem was really emotional. Sometimes we just end up falling for the wrong people. I hope time heals your wounds. Wonderful job here. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very emotional poem...and i loved the last verses...beautiful job ...hope to see more...bye i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I thought this was very good |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I honestly believe that this is a very well written poem. Why you don't like it, I cannot seem to understand. You did really good. keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I enjoyed it..i dont think it was bad at all! Nice topic...full of emotion...good job hun |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
(sniff) Boys....lol. Im well....guys come in and out our lives. sometimes we fall hard. sometimes its just their bodies.... But i really hope you keep your head up. all will be well. Regina |
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