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fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

0 posted 2001-06-09 12:35 PM

hey all...i don't really like this one lol. i just wanted to post something. i know the moderators have been getting rather touchy about a certain word that begins with the letter "s" and deals with killing yourself. sorry for using it in this poem. i am not a believer in suicide at all. just wanted to clear that up...please read and tell me your honest thoughts. thanks! =) -fear-

happy on the outside
but suicidal within.
when will this pain ever end?
when i love, i get hurt.
yea, it seems to be an endless cycle
love sucks.
it's true.
but i didn't think it did when i met you.
i thought you were different.
dammit, i thought u actually cared.
but i guess it was all an illision
u weren't ever really there
u never cared
never will.
and neither do i.
but then why
oh why
can't i.
stop from sighing
stop from crying
stop from lying to myself
i guess i do love you.
i just can't help myself.

-fear-

Dr. Jo-Bizz
Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 97

1 posted 2001-06-09 12:39 PM

why is suicidal a no-no word... or did I miss something again?

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2001-06-09 01:16 AM

The "s" word as you call it might be taken out but its good that you cleared up the reason as to why you put it in there in the first place. Wonderful poem...

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-06-09 02:29 AM

quite the emotional piece...you expressed your feelings well...great job!...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

4 posted 2001-06-09 07:28 AM

This is really good. I liked it. very well done. the thing that scares me about this one is i've felt this way before.
I don't get why talking about suiside is a no no either. It's an issue that all to oftern is swept under the rug.

fate can only take you so far, the rest is up to you

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

5 posted 2001-06-09 12:51 PM

This was great work.
I hope they dont take out the word "suicide" from it.

Regina

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

6 posted 2001-06-09 01:00 PM

i liked this..i can relate totally, and im sure this is sumthing everyone can say... i dont think the mods would kick this out...
*KiMMiE*

i wanted to kill the sexiest person alive, but then i realized suicide is a crime!! :)

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-06-09 07:42 PM

First off, Great poem.
Second off, we're not getting "touchy" with suicide. It's a stone written guideline that must be followed. We are here to uphold rules, and thus pull poems pertaining to a GLORIFICATION of suicide.

This poem doesn't exhibit any form of Glorification. I see one word that shows how you, at that moment, feel. The extreme form of sadness. However, this poem doesn't say anything about comitting the act.

I enjoyed the poem and hope to see more of your work, but in the future if you feel that a poem of yours might be in question within the guidelines do not post it.

Once again, an enjoyable post.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

8 posted 2001-06-09 11:44 PM

yes mr. moderator *smiles innocently* j/k dopey, thanks for not editing it. also thanks for being understanding about it. thanks to everybody who replied. i appreciate it greatly. byyyyyye!!!
-fear-

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