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my fire |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
Its funny how If you don’t think about the pain It ceases to exist But its there The burning of this everlasting fire Is far more painful to just forget about It rages inside me Feeding off my every thought My every emotion leaving me in the ruins of “myself” Filling my lungs with heavy dark smoke Making it impossible to breath, Or see past now Let alone live And I’m drowning in these black ashes Which have coated my soul, And harden Leaving me trapped inside Inside the place that scares me the most The core of my torture The place that is slowly killing me And home to the demons inside This fire is engulfing me inside But then the pain bleeds through And it terrifies me But I say to myself “Don’t think about the fire, The burning will soon end.” And sometimes If I’m lucky The fire becomes a flicker The smoke fades to a light cloud The ashes crumble from my soul And the pain ceases to exist But even so I will hurt tomorrow just the same Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
so true so true, you neglect the pain and it goes away just to come again later in life. The poem was really good I have read a bunch of your stuff and I really like it thanx The_Rescue in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work DAOTS... I really enjoyed the read and I hope to read more of your work soon. Zu "Death solves all problems, no man, no problem" J.V.Stalin 1918. |
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never_a_princess Member
since 2001-06-09
Posts 82Show Me the Money |
this is a wonderfully emotional poem..the reader can almost feel the fire burning..awesome job. ~Anna *waves* |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
Very good work. I especially enjoy the last 5 lines. Very vivid. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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XFalloutX Junior Member
since 2001-05-13
Posts 31NC |
True True True Oh how True. Very good  Keep up the good work "should I smile because we are friends or cry because thats all will ever be?". |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow! this is so good.....I really liked the way you described it |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this one. Good job here! Hope to see more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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