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Shyan Junior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 10Canada |
ALright, I cant say this gonna be good but man this is how i feel at the moment. I still think I really suck at stuff like this. So enjoy. Pleading with my heart Make it stop! Make all this rage................... all this pain and hurt STOP!!!!!!!!!! Why do I feel this way? Why do you make me feel this way? Why cant I just be ME? I'M NOT PERFECT! I am nothing, I am something. Make up your mind!!! Your pushing me away Push Push Push in all the wrong places Yell in my face Blame it on me Its all my fault Just take my heart and make it bleed tears Just make it STOP!!!!!!!!! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
intense writing here...you did a great job  ...i really liked the emotions in this poem...hope to see more...bye shyan  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
LOL, If you think you suck, I should tell you about the first time I posted a piece of mine, which I THOUGHT was iambic pentameter. It turned out that it was just 10 syllable lines. Anyhow, I think this was a fine poem. Poetry doesn't have to be genius material in order for you to write it. I know mine isn't. Sometimes you just have to let loose for a while in your poetry. Poetry is about how you feel. Sure the technical aspect of it is important, but feelings ain't too technical a lot of the time. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
We can only grow with our poetry if we are attentive to what others suggest with their individual knowledge of the art. Well done on this one. I enjoyed it and hope to see more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I like this poem, and I like how you express yourself in it! very well done!! I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
The title fits the poem nicely cuz im kinda confused myself! LoL ...nice poem Keep up the good work! |
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