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Dr. Jo-Bizz
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since 2001-06-06

Posts 97

0 posted 2001-06-06 10:19 PM

I watch them slip over the edge
Into the flames
Burning hotter than the living can fathom
Pain
Distilled, Concentrated
And waiting to consume
I watch them fall into this chasm
Glazed eyes
They go willfully towards
Destruction
Unable to pull them back
I can't scream loud enough
I tried--and
Failed
I cling to a friend
Snatching, struggling, fighting
To keep him from that Place
Instead
He drags me to the brink with him
I almost am lost
Singed
Choking, Gasping
Flames reach for me
Not strong enough
He slips from my grasp
Eternity
Forever
Screams fill my ears
Are they his--
or mine?

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-07 01:56 AM

i really like dthe tone in this poem...great job...enjoyed a lot

...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

2 posted 2001-06-07 02:01 AM

Are they his--
or mine?
wow..i love your style of poetry dr..its so cool..i love this poem...thank you for writing it hehe...yes i mean that too!!...emotions are well played throughout..and the images are as vivid as the get in narnia ....good work...more is good!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2001-06-07 02:05 AM

YaY! this one is kool :-)
-fear-

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

4 posted 2001-06-07 08:36 AM

This was awesome! I loved this so much!great job!

fall hard, practice harder not to fall

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

5 posted 2001-06-07 08:44 AM

nice one there dr. jo lol and yes just to let you know it is poetry as you. I've had a simular situation happen with me hopefully your friend has a fire proof suit, at least that's what I"m hoping for mine

Dr. Jo-Bizz
Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 97

6 posted 2001-06-07 09:04 AM

no he doesn't. they are all perishing and i can't stop it.

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

7 posted 2001-06-07 09:46 PM

aww i loved it nice job here!

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-06-09 07:58 PM

I really liked the ending to this one. Amazing....You wrote this well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-06-12 11:04 AM

That was a really good read. Haven't really read anything of yours I think. I'm very impressed. keep it up

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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

10 posted 2001-06-12 11:11 AM

Great work I really enjoyed the read, well done.
Zu

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

11 posted 2001-06-12 11:12 AM

dr jo you know the deal all you have to is pray about it

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN)

never_a_princess
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since 2001-06-09

Posts 82
Show Me the Money

12 posted 2001-06-12 02:28 PM

*wowz* This is really well-written..brings picture to the reader's mind instantly..i liked your tone in this..it was..nice..well, more than nice, but words are escaping my mind at the moment..*awesome poem*
~Anna *waves*

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

13 posted 2001-06-14 01:12 PM

I like this poem. it is really cool...and I honestly have no clue what to say...

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

angel_2401
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since 2001-06-12

Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH

14 posted 2001-06-14 01:29 PM

I like this one.

keep writing!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

15 posted 2001-06-14 03:49 PM

wow, i liked this. good job.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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