Teen Poetry #4 |
Superevil Superhero |
the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
Ok this is my intresting poem. Superevil superhero want to be like the caped crusader and the dim brightness of tomorrow all he sees is a bit of sorrow Superevil Superhero while he fights for justice it's evil he causes to reign instead of joy he causes pain Superevil Superhero takes the tranquil chaos and turns it into a disturbing peace while hoping that his troubles will cease Superevil Superhero uses his blinded sight and then turns a deaf ear just so that he can hear Superevil Superhero speaks with a mute voice hoping the evil around him will run so he can go back out and have some fun Superevil Superhero with his pesimistic hope tries to help those around town those he finds with a smiling frown Superevil Superhero wants to be greater than negitive zero but in his sorrowful joy he forgets he's only a grown boy Ok basically this a really wierd poem like I said but the oxymorons used in the poem actually present a message, through the first couple parts it's talking about humans ability to seem like hero's when they talk about issues, for ex. hunger, we all talk about it but all turn a deaf ear, which acounts for the evil part of it. The end of the poem shows the realization of these facts in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
depart from me, be warmed and filled', yet you do not give them that which they need. yah. this is rad. keep on kicking the devil. dr. jo-bizz But His word was in my heart |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I like your wording here. The end is especially good, in which you use the term "grown boy." That really adds an air of insignificance to the main character. Well done here. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
hey hun this is awesome! ok yall need to let robin in on all these new smileys i see! robin |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the format was nice...i liked it...very creative ...bye i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot. I thought the message was great. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Cool message!!!! I enjoyed this |
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