Teen Poetry #4 |
Despair |
Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
Kicking and fighting Struggling for light for air, for life I claw for the surface For a breath before The waves suffocate me Drowning In a sea of my own Tears Despair- That six fingered sea monster Twines cold fingers around my leg Dragging me down Down Holding me beneath the waves of endless, pounding Anguish I could cut his fingers With my Sword With Truth Hope I could free myself from the painful grip of Death But I am too stupid too Stupid to live to fight or to love Suffocation Surrender to evil Despair- claims victory Once more. [This message has been edited by Dr. Jo-Bizz (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
~Welcome to passions~ I hope that you enjoy it here just as much as I do! Great first post! Kinda got my imagination thinking a bit! I hope to see more work by you soon! "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! Well done on your first post. You prove to show quite a bit of creativity to your work and I liked it immensely. I enjoyed this piece and hope to see more from you! Check your e-mail for a special message! Dopey_Dope/Moderator I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
thanks, um dopey. alas, I am an artist not a poet. but thank you for your kind words. dr. jo-bizz But His word was in my heart |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
actually I hate depressing poetry. but I had a hard time this week and I sort of started thinking about a painting dealing with this issue and so I wrote about it first and it sort of evolved into ... um.. whatever this is. for the record, I have not given into the serpent in the sea yet. my sword still causes him grief at every opportunity. dr. jo-bizz. But His word was in my heart |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS ...im glad to see you share your poems here ...and this was well expressed...i liked it...great job and hope to see more...bye i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wow your first post is amazing!!!..keep posting till it hurts!!!!..i want to read more of your work so get to it!!!...more says i!!!.. ...
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
man...you better post more poems soon!...damsel is known in passions...in kicking major arse! i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
*welcomes you * hiya jo wuz up hun come and join the party *dances with jo* we have a lot of fun here i hope to talk to you soon ok love ya later ben redshaw the great out!! ps thanks for seeing that albert i missed it ben i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be. i always thought i was right here [This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
he didnt say "ben rawshaw the great out!" i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
ty ben. wo ist meine tiff? dr. jo-bizz But His word was in my heart |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
is yous another one of bens friends? kool so is me. i is robin. i likes yer poem it was kewl. *welcomes yous to passions* robin I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
oh and i likes your name reminds me of some guy in a band named sum 41 lol! robin |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
*gasp* ooo tis my jo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *does the its my Jo-bizz dance* gawwsh jo....i miss you soo much awww *hugs* im gonna send my snail mail soon! i promise..i still havent sent ne of em so its not just u:P eep *hides* lol newayz.... WELCOME TO PASSIONSi hope you like it here jo and post lots more of ur work! and wut u talkin bout! ur a great poet..AND artist! i never knew u had this n u hun! its great. i loved it. its even better bcuz i know u and know wut ur talking bout in it. u did great on this hun. and i cant wait to c more. i loved this: "With my Sword With Truth Hope I could free myself from the painful grip of Death" its just..idk sooo u. lol hmm im ramblin here so ill heshup. i love you jo! cant wait to talk to u. and i miss u *hugs* tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome To Passions!!!! Hey!! Great to have you with us I really liked your first post and i cant wait to read more from u Keep em comin! |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
good job got a lot of it out of well written thanx |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Conspiracy theorem reigns supreme..... Enjoyed immensely by me. Awaiting the next... ~Carly "Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..." |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
This was truly AWESOME. i loved this. welcome to passions, i hope u enjoy ur stay here.!this was a great first post! ~ fall hard, practice harder not to fall |
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xx_radical_xx New Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 1 |
cool |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions in POetry! I REALLY enjoyed this first post. It's very well written. I look forward to more, so keep posting all your work. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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