Teen Poetry #4 |
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Despair |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
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Kicking and fighting Struggling for light for air, for life I claw for the surface For a breath before The waves suffocate me Drowning In a sea of my own Tears Despair- That six fingered sea monster Twines cold fingers around my leg Dragging me down Down Holding me beneath the waves of endless, pounding Anguish I could cut his fingers With my Sword With Truth Hope I could free myself from the painful grip of Death But I am too stupid too Stupid to live to fight or to love Suffocation Surrender to evil Despair- claims victory Once more. [This message has been edited by Dr. Jo-Bizz (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
~Welcome to passions~ I hope that you enjoy it here just as much as I do! Great first post! Kinda got my imagination thinking a bit! I hope to see more work by you soon! "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! Well done on your first post. You prove to show quite a bit of creativity to your work and I liked it immensely. I enjoyed this piece and hope to see more from you! Check your e-mail for a special message! Dopey_Dope/Moderator ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
thanks, um dopey. alas, I am an artist not a poet. but thank you for your kind words. dr. jo-bizz But His word was in my heart |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
actually I hate depressing poetry. but I had a hard time this week and I sort of started thinking about a painting dealing with this issue and so I wrote about it first and it sort of evolved into ... um.. whatever this is. for the record, I have not given into the serpent in the sea yet. my sword still causes him grief at every opportunity. dr. jo-bizz. But His word was in my heart |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() wow your first post is amazing!!!..keep posting till it hurts!!!!..i want to read more of your work so get to it!!!...more says i!!!.. ![]() ![]() ![]()
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
man...you better post more poems soon!...damsel is known in passions...in kicking major arse! i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
*welcomes you * hiya jo wuz up hun come and join the party *dances with jo* we have a lot of fun here i hope to talk to you soon ok love ya later ben redshaw the great out!! ps thanks for seeing that albert i missed it ben i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be. i always thought i was right here [This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
he didnt say "ben rawshaw the great out!" ![]() i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
ty ben. wo ist meine tiff? dr. jo-bizz But His word was in my heart |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
is yous another one of bens friends? kool so is me. i is robin. i likes yer poem it was kewl. *welcomes yous to passions* robin ![]() I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
oh and i likes your name reminds me of some guy in a band named sum 41 lol! robin |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
*gasp* ooo tis my jo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *does the its my Jo-bizz dance* gawwsh jo....i miss you soo much ![]() WELCOME TO PASSIONSi hope you like it here jo and post lots more of ur work! and wut u talkin bout! ur a great poet..AND artist! i never knew u had this n u hun! its great. i loved it. its even better bcuz i know u and know wut ur talking bout in it. u did great on this hun. and i cant wait to c more. i loved this: "With my Sword With Truth Hope I could free myself from the painful grip of Death" its just..idk sooo u. lol hmm im ramblin here so ill heshup. i love you jo! cant wait to talk to u. and i miss u ![]() tiff ![]() “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
![]() ![]() Hey!! Great to have you with us ![]() ![]() |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
good job got a lot of it out of well written thanx |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Conspiracy theorem reigns supreme..... ![]() Enjoyed immensely by me. Awaiting the next... ![]() ~Carly "Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..." |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
This was truly AWESOME. i loved this. welcome to passions, i hope u enjoy ur stay here.!this was a great first post! ~ ![]() fall hard, practice harder not to fall |
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xx_radical_xx New Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 1 |
cool |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions in POetry! I REALLY enjoyed this first post. It's very well written. I look forward to more, so keep posting all your work. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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