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Nicholas
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since 2001-06-08
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0 posted 2001-06-08 10:43 PM


Hi I'm a new member to all this and just want to know what you think about this poem. Thanks


       You Never Knew

I've wanted you to be mine
This is what I longed for all the time
Words could not describe your beauty
But this you never knew

I am your friend
But through Christ your brother
Though I wish and pray
That maybe someday
I could be something other
This you never knew

      -Nicholas-


© Copyright 2001 Nicholas - All Rights Reserved
Evylyn
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since 2001-06-04
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1 posted 2001-06-08 11:21 PM


Oh, this is so touching, Nicholas!  It was very short, but extra sweet.  I can't wait to read more of your stuff!  

*Moves out of the way so more people may comment on such a piece*  ;o}

"The only thing that boggles the mind is the mind itself."

Dr. Jo-Bizz
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2 posted 2001-06-08 11:59 PM


yeh, this one spoke to me cause yeah, i know what its like to want more from a relationship than friendship... even when God seems to be saying no.     sucks, but He knows best

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

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3 posted 2001-06-09 01:10 AM


Welcome To passions!

What a sweet piece!! I really enjoyed it...welcome!!!

P.S.- Check your e-mail for a special greeting!

MindlessPoet
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4 posted 2001-06-09 02:01 AM


Hola!  Welcome to Passions, and that's a nice poem    Although it sucks to be in that situation :p
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5 posted 2001-06-09 02:31 AM


first of all...WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!...and on the poem it was nice and sweet...you should let this person know ...good luck and se you around...bye Nicholas

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Angelwings
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6 posted 2001-06-09 03:48 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!!! (with open arms!!)  What a wonderful expression of feelings.  I'm sorry that you have to be in this situation though it's not a good situation to be in.  But it's a wonderful way to say the things that you just can't seem to "say"!

*that what does not kill us makes us stronger!*

*Everyone can deal with pain in their own way, some things are just harder than others!*

Ina
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7 posted 2001-06-09 12:49 PM


Welcome to passion!    

This was a great first post. Friends will be around longer that boyfriends and girlfriends.

Regina

lonely*soul
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8 posted 2001-06-09 01:03 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS    ya know what i think..i think you should tell him/or her...so they know!!!

i wanted to kill the sexiest person alive, but then i realized suicide is a crime!! :)

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9 posted 2001-06-10 12:46 PM


This was really great.....I enjoyed this a lot!
Welcome to Passions!!!!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fozzyozzy
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10 posted 2001-06-10 12:54 PM


Wilkommen zu Passions

Awww. This hit me hard because I went through that too(I guess I'm not the only teenager with problems )  
Sweet, never give up until the restraining order is up to 100ft! jking

"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

Nicholas
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Washington , U.S
11 posted 2001-06-10 01:04 AM


I just want to thank you guys for the replies and the really warm welcome to passions.
Nicholas
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Washington , U.S
12 posted 2001-06-10 01:06 AM


I just want to thank you guys for the replies and the really warm welcome to passions.
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13 posted 2001-06-16 03:11 PM


Welcome to Passions, Nick!
Very nicely written first post.  I enjoyed the read... it's very honest.  Good luck in this situation.  Keep sharing all your work.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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