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Dana Samples
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since 2001-04-07

Posts 68

0 posted 2001-06-05 08:56 PM

unspoken words
of insanity
seem to leave one
a mystery
mind boggled
in confusion
nothing but
med. distribution

clawing down
padded walls
security leads you
down the halls
shots of another
sedative
nurses seem
so provocative

chaos echoes through
my head
nothing left of the
marshmallow bed
pinned down
to the floor
23 inches
from the door

side swiped
by the cart
I wonder if
they’re serving heart
nothing but
rats on a tray
reminds me of
a yesterday

mind recoils
in fright
will I make it
one more night
kneel down
pray to God
now its time
for your applaud

the time lost
seems surreal
there’s nothing left
that I feel
now its time
to say goodbye
so long for now
or until I die

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ana Samples 6-3-01

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Member Seraphic

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Posts 22676
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1 posted 2001-06-05 09:00 PM

wow...this is powerful writing...I hope all is ok with you

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-05 10:33 PM

Amazing. I so loved the flow here. This was powerful! VERY powerful! One of your best in my eyes. I loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-06-05 11:45 PM

imagery was real and the writing very powerful...great job...i liked it a lot

...bye dana

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dr. Jo-Bizz
Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 97

4 posted 2001-06-06 01:23 AM

I liked it. I'd love to hear the story of the incident that induced you to write this.

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2001-06-06 08:00 AM

Wow...simply amazing! Im speechless for once! Great job....really hun...absolutely wonderful. Hope all is ok

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

6 posted 2001-06-06 08:42 AM

wow that was great I really like the poem it rocked, great imagery and flow

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

7 posted 2001-06-06 11:37 AM

Yo dawg...Javi said it was powerful...you bess enjoy that compliment!! I too thought this was one of your best....well I'll see you on the bus tomorrow.

~Carly

"Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..."
~Edouard Manet

Dana Samples
Member

since 2001-04-07

Posts 68

8 posted 2001-06-08 12:24 PM

Hey! This actually came from the way i thought i was crazy when i was depressed and was in Pine Rest (hospital). nothing made sense then and parts of the poem are actually about the hospital. so thats what happend.

lots of love, dana

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