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LCsftball16
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 39

0 posted 2001-06-02 06:52 PM

lemme know what you think!

Did you hear the blue birds sing?
Could you hear the church bells ring?
Did you stop to watch children play?
Wansn't worth it anyway.

Could you enjoy a summer rain?
Did a girl cause you pain?
Could you go out more than time allowed?
Doesn't matter anyhow.

Did you see someone cry?
Could you watch someone die?
Did you live life like this everyday?
Even before you went away?

Before you saw angels weep?
Before they buried you 6 feet deep?
Before Satan damned you in Hell?
I hadn't the chance to wish you well.

Didn't you know enough to say "hi"
Or enough to say good-bye.
Though your death is something I can't forget
I'll miss you Lewis Angerett.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2001-06-02 06:58 PM

This was so sad!!! :hugs::

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

2 posted 2001-06-02 11:39 PM

I like the rhyme. Kinda hides the true purpose of the poem 'til the end, where it hits with dreadful violence...

As far as the sympathy of strangers goes, I am sorry for your loss.

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes!

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

3 posted 2001-06-02 11:43 PM

your first stanza reminded me of the song "Colours of the Wind"...don't ask me why though...

i ditto Deranger...i had no inkling of your ending and my eyebrows arched upwards as i read to the end...

an emotional piece and i hope time will help to lessen your wounds...

HUGS

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-06-03 04:26 PM

Very emotional indeed. A poem well done! I enjoyed this very much and hope time heals you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

5 posted 2001-06-03 04:28 PM

This was so powerful !!!! This is the first post ive read from you and its rockin!

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

6 posted 2001-06-03 04:28 PM

A great read well done

hope to see more of your work in the future.
Zu

HeAvEnS AnGeL
Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

7 posted 2001-06-05 12:30 PM

*Tears* Litrally! My uncle just died 2 days ago so I can totally relate to this poem. But just remember hunny, god needs the best people on earth to be angles so thats why he takes are loved ones, becoz they are the best. Keep smiling

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

LCsftball16
Junior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 39

8 posted 2001-06-05 12:36 PM

thanks for reading!!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-06-08 12:06 PM

Emotional poem. But I just don't understand how you could say that he's damned in hell. That line just got me thinking I guess. well done and keep sharing

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the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

10 posted 2001-06-08 12:14 PM

I like the poem it was really good thanx for the write.

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN)

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