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Another sad past
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Another sad past |
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Sabriel.s.h.lover Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 73b.f.e. aka- Hickville |
As I looked into his deep brown eyes, I saw into his past. I saw all the tragedy, and i saw all the lies. I looked into his soul, and saw his broken heart. I saw how much of his life, she had torn apart. I felt all the heart-stopping pain, I saw all the emotions being thrown away. I could tell why, he had kept his feelings at bay. She had destroyed him. And with tremendous power at that. She had kicked him away, and knocked him down flat. What chance had he stood, against this tyrant? This terror? Not even that did he know. For in her calculations, she had made an error. She had let him near me. And I had fallen in love with him. He loved me back, In my love he did swim. He paddled his way into my heart, With only her in his way. I loved him more than anything, And he was there to stay. She could no longer control him, She could no longer rant and rave. If I would have been her, I would have been ashamed of the way she behaved. She couldn't make him her slave, She couldn't make him do all the work. She couldn't laugh at his weaknesses, With a smile or a smirk. She was now alone............... So many books, so little time |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
You are telling the truth! Although this girl does have a big part in your guys past, you are the girl he thinks about now, and she more unhappy than anyone. Powerful insight here. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Shyan Junior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 10Canada |
Hey, well I just thought that I would say hi........you know. I read your poem, really good stuff. I dont really know what to say, cuz like I'm new on here an stuff. But any ways, thought it was great stuff. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this poem was great...i like the way you have written this...well done...and thanks for the read...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I'll ditto erica because she has said it all. Truthful poems rock.  ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i liked the message in this one a lot, you expressed yourself well trhough this poem. great writing, keep sharing your work with us Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a very good poem. I liked how you talked about seeing everything through his eyes...afterall they say that the eyes are the windows to the soul. Good job |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
I really liked this one and I can relate to it Keep writing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
well doen on this poem. I liked it a lot! Very tru!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hmmmm.....I feel happy fo ryou, but also sorry for her. I guess that's how life works. Good job. thanks for the share. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel |
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