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StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

0 posted 2001-06-05 05:37 PM

the sun falls
and it creeps
on tip-toe quietly
while the world sleeps
it taunts and teases
and sets to leave scars
as i pry endlessly
at these relentless bars
there is no end
to this eerie silence
so my heart quietly
gives into the violence
broken feelings
pave the way for sadness
as i strive to find
an end to all this madness
fear overwhelms me
as i lay and anticipate the light
still, the time stands still
and this creature steals my sight
such a quiet and lonely place
to which i submit my fears
such a quiet and lonely place;
the land of tears...

~*~|Jesilyn|6-5-01|~*~

"Tell me why you cry"

[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 06-05-2001).]

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-05 05:39 PM

great poem...i loved it...cuz i realted to this so called "place" it was well expressed...enjoyed greatly

...thanks for sharing it....bye jessica

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-06-05 05:53 PM

Jess --- I see that you have definitely changed your style in poetry writing. I like you new style better than the old one, and I believe it's cause you to grow with your poetry. Beautiful write Jess, keep em coming

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Allan, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michele,

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-05 10:26 PM

Awwww this was so sad. The ending really hit me. I loved it. Great job on this one!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

4 posted 2001-06-06 01:07 AM

~JeLlO~
You just keep them coming dont you. Im so jealous cause I cant even write one full poem. You are doing a great job on these. You have a very creative mind. Thanks for sharing a piece of it with us!!

"If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend."

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2001-06-09 08:18 PM

oooo i liked this one! And i liked the title of it too...

Keep em rollin hehe

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