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LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

0 posted 2001-06-05 01:08 PM

“Demons”

Calling forth
The demons of life
While pushing foreward
To slay them all

Frozen in time
Partial to none
For the fiends
Are everywhere

Moving in silence
For all to hear
Glancing about
For the ones who cause fear

Power gained
With each one slain
Upon the blood stained ground
Stronger I became

Battles done
The demons slain
Times begun
To change again

Hero born
Tried and true
Upon the mirror I look to see
That I have become a demon too

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

[This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 06-05-2001).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-06-05 01:32 PM

wow...vivid....creative...and very very good

~SEA

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

2 posted 2001-06-05 01:42 PM

Impressive. I like the fantasy-type tone in this poem. You did a good job here.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-06-05 04:19 PM

i liked the imagery with great choice of word format...and the end...powerful

...bye lone

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-06-05 10:09 PM

Well done here. I enjoyed this one. Keep posting man!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Dr. Jo-Bizz
Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 97

5 posted 2001-06-06 01:34 AM

interesting reversals. I fight demons too. but I usually find that the more I "slay" the less like them I become.... I liked your word choices.

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2001-06-06 07:55 AM

WOnderful

i enjoyed the fantasy effect you added to this....niceeeeeeeeeee

Hehehe keep em comin!!!

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

7 posted 2001-06-06 08:57 AM

I thought that was really tight the poem in general just rocked and then the ending was a suprise.

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