Teen Poetry #4 |
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
You took a big piece of my heart when you left my months ago My heart is in one piece again but its no longer my own Ive given tou my heart once more you hold it in your hand i think that i can trust you now oh,god i hope i can I love you more than you could know throuch sunshine and through rain And im hoping we'll find happiness and forget about past pain ~I know this sux but i just wrote it in like 5 seconds~ |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I dont think it sux at all!!! You heart goes through a lot when you open it up to someone...but hopefully it will be repaired soon ![]() |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
I dont' think this sux either. I liked it a lot. good job here. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I think it's fine...some spelling errors is all I see.....other than that it's a great expression of emotions ![]() |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"I love you more than you could know throuch sunshine and through rain And im hoping we'll find happiness and forget about past pain" i really liekd the last verses...very reall lines...great job ![]() ![]() i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here? I loved this. Besdies a few spelling errors you've done so well. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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