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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Eight months together Seems like forever Its come down to this one night Will I be able to continue the fight? My friends all warned me They said to watch out But I was sure I could resist you I had no doubts. It started with a kiss but turned into more We started heading towards a place we had never been before. You said that you loved me Why couldnt I see It was neither my heart nor mind that you wanted from me So I gave in I didnt say no I can see now How I was majorly played. Why I fell for you I am not really sure But its been a week now You still havent called. I'd held on to it for 19 years now its gone and all I have is tears My heart is breaking my innocence taken. Why I gave it to you I will never quite know I am sure I will find love one day that can finally fill the hole. I'm sure I'll be fine with just a little time Someone, someday will break your heart the way you did mine. [This message has been edited by Shygirl82 (edited 06-05-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
WOw.....this was so utterly sad. I feel you here......man....some guys can be so evil. I enjoyed this so much. Oh it's so sad, you expressed this amazingly. I hope you get better and find a REAL MAN someday. You deserve it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this sounds exactly like what happened to me atabout the same age....I was alomst 19 when it happened to me.....I think you need to get angry and realize what a jerk he is.... here is one I wrote for the guy who did it to me....... ******** tell me how you do it show me the way to break someone's heart then just walk away You do it so easy what's your trick You do it so easy you make me sick How do you know who it will be what do you look for what do you see Share with me your secret then tell me how you can do what you do and still call yourself a man ~SEA~ ********* at any rate...I understand, and I'm so sorry you had to go through it....love does come along....I'm proof  keep your chin up.....and keep writing..this was great....hugs to you...SEA |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
SEA....thankyou sooo much for sharing...it honestly meant alot to me...its good to know people care...it has been hard to deal with but I am doing much better. Dopey thanks for your comments too. I know their are real MEN out there somewhere. Thanks to you both...I really appreciate it lots of love, ~Nikki~ |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
Shygirl82, I'm sorry that you had to have it go out like this! The guy is a real jerk to treat you like that! You deserve and will get better than him, I promise you that. And everyone is entitled to their one mistake; we'll let you count this one as yours. I love ya girl~ Chelsea *that which does not kill us makes us stronger!* [This message has been edited by Angelwings (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow this was an amazing poem...but so sad!!! when you loose something very valuable and important to you it leaves u with such an empty feeling..im sorry this happened. I loved this line "tell me how you do it show me the way to break someone's heart then just walk away" I thought it was just amazing along with the rest of the poem. Amazing job....::Hugs:: |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
wow the poem itself was really good while the circumstances really sucked I'm sorry that it happened hope all goes well and there are nice guys out there who wont take advatage of you or treat you bad hope you find him and he wipes all your tears away because his greatest joy will be seeing you happy in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow...great poem...quite powerful emotions protrayed here...i really liked the poem...this was very sad...i hope you feel better ...you have written this so well...bye Nikki  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Thanks to everyone who replied to this poem..as most of you could tell...it was difficult for me to share but it made me feel so much when I read your comforting words...Thankyou so much  love always, ~Nikki~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey wow I just found this poem. Some guys are just the scum of the Earth, not worth spitting on if they were on fire. Maybe that's not harsh enough..you get the idea. I sorry this happened to you. He'll get his eventually, don't worry. Bel |
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Pickleweasel New Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 7AL |
Hey. The poem was great, but thats a really sad thing that happened. A lot of guys can be jerks sometimes(although I'm a guy I try not be a jerk). I'm sure that you'll find someone that'll treat you nice. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Oh Nikki... I'm sorry this happened. You wrote your feelings down well though. Most men are pigs...always after that one thing. Great Read. |
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holatuwol Member
since 2001-04-27
Posts 72California, USA |
A very emotional piece with definite stanzas in it that move the reader to feel what the writer seemed to be thinking at the various points in time. ^_^ That's a skill which very few people possess... and I think that you have quite a way with words. 'Tis a sad experience to have to live through... but you seem to have grown and learned from it and woven quite an impressive piece of verse from it. And since the past cannot be changed, that's what important, ne? This poem seemed to have a lot of things which a lot of people here seem to be able to relate to. It is often said that things which don't kill you will come to make you stronger... hopefully, from what I've seen from the emotion in this piece, you'll stop shedding tears of hurt and be able to move on with your life. ^_^ My favorite line set is the third stanza... but that's basically where the poem officially starts, in my opinion, and that's where all of the poem's flow seems to head towards... if that makes an sense. ^_^ It seems to sum up the entire poem in ways that tne ending and the introduction could not... and definitely had the strongest echo for me. ^_^ A really nice piece of work, and it's the first piece I've seen from you, or at least the first one which really made an impact, if I've read others of yours before, but haven't made a name connection yet. ^_^ Beautiful writing... and until next time. Keep your chin up, ne? ^_~ Ja! - holatuwol |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
This is beautifully written!! The pain...the shock...the betrayal...the distress...so many emotions pulled at my heart strings. I could "feel" all the sentiments here. Certainly the circumstances you had to endure were very tragic and I am sorry this happened to you. Very sorry! This one is a keeper! Excellent! |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
oh wow...I felt this one...this was a much appreciated read. So honest and open, and beautifully written. Great job here hun! "Make your life like toiletpaper - long and useful." |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I musta missed this one I'm glad I came back in and read it tho...  I know this is prolly long over, and you're feeling better.. but I just want to let you know that I enjoyed your poem, and I hope you're feeling stronger now. I also have that little problem saying no, and it sometimes gets me into trouble. And into sitch's I'd rather not be in. Glad to see your work...keep it up!Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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