Teen Poetry #4 |
Ride The Tempest |
Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Subdued and tranquil, with liquid eyes. Audacity awaits the lamentation and sighs Eyes luminescence effulgently though melancholy still. A smile emerges through Hells semitransparent hill. And as the tempest thrashes the cloaked vest. You shall descry you’ve tried your best. And so I expound permit the thunder roar. Grant the lightening strike. Have the tears pour. For you’ll never encountering what you conceivable do......... unless you let the storm come through. < !signature--> look forward,But forget not the past for it has brought you this far~by Allan and Amanda [This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 01-26-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was really good. I liked this poem a lot. Liquid eyes.........that stood out in the poem for me for some reason. Anyway the poem was well written. I liked the message too. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
wow this is amazing...you wrote this perfect ly and the end just wraps it up so well...great work "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
my favorite line was: "A smile emerges through Hells semitransparent hill." that created a vivid scene, great job... and beautiful description -Knightfellow "If you had a choice to believe in yourself, or another person, who would it be?" |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Dopey~ Thank you for your comment it was much appreciated. anomaly~ Thank you for the smile Knightfellow~ Thank you for the comment and I am pleased to hear that you have gotten a vivid scene from the poem. look forward,But forget not the past for it has brought you this far~by Allan and Amanda |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
glad to see you're posting again what a way to do so marvelous writing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
And as the tempest thrashes the cloaked vest. You shall descry you’ve tried your best. And so I expound permit the thunder roar. Grant the lightening strike. Have the tears pour. ============================================= Really loved this. Great imagery. "Hearts will become practical when they make them unbreakable" ~The Wizard of Oz Much love all, Krissie |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Acrie~ Glaid to see all of you again. And thank you Anikay~ Thank you for the smile as well as comment. Very much appreciated. ~Amanda~ What comes with love are tears of pain. What comes with hate are brighter days~ Amanda |
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