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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: Tonight is bad poetry night Kids.......can we say BAD?.....BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAD.....there you go! Changed Love: Wondering where clouds of happiness go. Tears of love that I surely know. Angel wings plucked to the skin. Shackled against a wall is where I've been. Escape my hell as fast as I can. The coward ways, the foolish man. Burning embers throughout the day. To change my mind is the only way.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"Angel wings plucked to the skin." Doesn't it hurt to have wings, but you still can't fly? This is one of your good ones Dopes I love it Thanks for sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Yes...I can say BBBAAAAAADDD....but why do I need to when this is GGOOOOOOOOOOODDD??? Excellent job on this one, keep it up! Much Luv, ~*~P*R*I*S*C*I*L*L*A~*~ PS~ Tu es tres poetique! How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Meh...Mediocre...Or not! I thought this was very good indeed. That line that acire pointed out really hit me..Keep blessing us with your talent. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
What would you call good, man? Sheesh. I would hate to have you as a critic! good job! xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
very cool. it was good. dont be so hard on your poetry. its very amazing and you know it! Regina |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
oooooh I really liked this! Nice job, as always!  |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hmm so who's fishing for compliments Dopey? *L* jk  This is a good piece and you know it. I'd love to say bad, I really would, but it just isn't happening for me because it isn't!! The one line that actually hit me was: "Escape my hell as fast as I can." Wouldn't we all love to escape our hell? As usual, great writing. Even if you think it is BAAAAAAAAD. ~AF~< !signature--> "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha [This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 01-26-2001).] |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
heh wouldn't you like to think that...a great post dopey..i don't believe i have ever seen something bad by you..ever "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Yeah, you're right, this is just horrible. :P What'd I tell you about being too self critical? This poem is great. Thanks for your help with the title to my poem. lol Btw...I got your email with your pic and I didn't know it was from you..I was like "Who's this hot guy?" lol Then I realized it was you. < !signature--> I am no one if not myself. Angel of Darkness [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 01-26-2001).] |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
i think this was the first poem of yours I read there is definately a lot of talent evident in your writing it sometimes isnt a bad thing to be self critical, it helps you change... nice post! -Knightfellow "If you had a choice to believe in yourself, or another person, who would it be?" |
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