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Meggie1986
Junior Member

since 2001-05-22

Posts 41
California

0 posted 2001-06-01 11:58 PM

I lose you in daytime,
I find you each night.
You tell me you love me,
But avoid my sight.

I once tried to see you.
You moved into dark.
You're always in shadow
Except in my heart.

I believe you're an angel,
Sent from above,
But you're absent in light
And thrive on my love.

Maybe you're something
Not better or worse,
Perhaps only human,
Which isn't a curse.

Why you're only happy
When day is away
Is the unsolved mystery,
Oh why can't you stay?

I lose you in daytime,
I find you each night.
You tell me you love me,
But avoid my sight.

*One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it.

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

1 posted 2001-06-02 12:12 PM

i think u did a good job on this! i liked it alot. and i LOVE the title of it!!! it had a nice flow too! great work!
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

Where are you when i need you....?

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-06-02 12:16 PM

beautfiul job...you wrote this very well...i liked it lots also i hope everything works out

...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2001-06-02 08:31 AM

Good questions, good format! Enjoyed!

LoveBug

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Member Elite

since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

4 posted 2001-06-02 11:48 AM

GREEK MYTHOLOGY ROCKS!

I really love this piece... describes the myth well, and it seems that it ties into a situation you are in right now. Anyway, great work. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-06-02 03:41 PM

I love mythology....well done here meggie!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Deranger
Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

6 posted 2001-06-02 07:11 PM

"We only come out at night - i the days are much to bright...we only come out at night..."

Eros...hmmm. The whole thing had some mystique to it, i really liked the repetition at the end...

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes!

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

7 posted 2001-06-02 10:40 PM

I love this!!! simple in a way yet complex in another way. Great job Meggie. Keep em comin!

Fozzyozzy

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
Robert Fr

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

8 posted 2001-06-02 10:59 PM

Hmm that's great!
I love the title

Bel

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

9 posted 2001-06-03 12:03 PM

meggie, i enjoy your writing a lot...you seem to have a knack for implying complexity in your simple poems...

post more, i'll read more

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

10 posted 2001-06-03 10:50 PM

I like this very much! Great job!

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