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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2001-06-01 07:50 PM


You're a good for nothing baller,
Same goes for your stupid posse.
I know you're just using me,
I ain't gonna take it no more.
I'm gonna leave you to be tortured,
Just as you would me.
Cause, I've seen the real you,
And I don't like what I'm seeing.
It's not the you that I know,
I know there's a sweet person,
Some where inside you.
That was my goal,
To find the other you..........
But I guess I never found the him,
I thought I knew.


fall hard, practice harder not to fall

[This message has been edited by Spine Grinder (edited 06-01-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-02 12:26 PM


yea...i feel you this shows some people thats just hard to change...you told it nicely ...with the bitterness that come with it...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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The Hot Girl From Canada
2 posted 2001-06-02 01:52 AM


I loved the way you got your point across in this poem   some people are just cruel but so hard to resist.  You'll do anything to be running with the "popular crowd"

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

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3 posted 2001-06-02 03:30 PM


Sad poem here. It sucks that you couldn't get to know the person....move on and you'll find a good man. Hope all goes well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Spice
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Resting in my cardboard box.
4 posted 2001-06-02 11:59 PM


Great writing.
It was strong, clear, and to the point.
This showed your feelings well.

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with you
5 posted 2001-06-03 10:48 PM


wow...this is great!
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