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n e where
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0 posted 2001-06-01 06:30 PM


This poem was based on a dream I had...go figure..

Somewhere else
In the distance I can hear
Here name
Being carried along by the wind
Deciding to land
Right in front of my eyes
As if to remind me
I am in love with her and it hurts

I think
I am not sure
I can see her figure emerging
From the blurry distant lights of the city
Into the dark quietness of the woods beyond

Sometimes I feel
She wants me to touch her
In a way that no man can
But there is a plain glass window
That she sits behind
Never letting anyone but herself through

I want to get through
And show her the beauty she posesses
But as I place my hands against
the cold glass
She steps back
In dispair and awkwardness

For fear of geting caught
By the ones that don't accept.

~I'd rather see the world from another angle~ Jewel.

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Spine Grinder
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1 posted 2001-06-01 08:53 PM


this was very powerful and cool. Nice job.

fall hard, practice harder not to fall

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14
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2 posted 2001-06-01 09:50 PM


this was good! i loved the imagery of it and the story behind it. umm as for sybolism...im a weirdO so its prolly not wut u meant but i liked it for wut i got out of it so woo hoo 4 u! great job on this. keep writin.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

Where are you when i need you....?

sexychick
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since 2001-05-28
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Michigan, Bay City
3 posted 2001-06-01 10:11 PM



nice poem very well write, keep on writting and i hope to read more

Ski*Chick
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Fitchburg, Mass, Usa
4 posted 2001-06-01 11:36 PM


that was a very nice poem   Minna  

Learning how to walk, Learning how to talk, are the hardest thing to do in a baby life. Learning how to walk for me is the hardest thing to do.

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5 posted 2001-06-02 12:24 PM


powerful...i liked it lots...nice poem...great job ...bye

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6 posted 2001-06-02 03:17 PM


Well done here. I enjoyed this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-06-07 10:40 PM


Dreamy   I liked how it was written...nice job  
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8 posted 2001-06-08 06:21 PM


cool write  
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