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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-06-01 08:05 AM


Innocence Lost

So now my innocence is lost gone a memory of the past
I searched but I could find nothing to fill the void so vast.
I am consumed with self nothing greater than me
It’s brought me down and kept me from being free
So I sit I cry I laugh and don’t try
My own rebellion leads me to die.
Staggering I don’t want to let go, cant let go of what I’ve gripped
But my time rages on and I’m slowly being stripped
Stripped of my dignity and all of my hope
I rage on seeking something to help me cope.
Like the blind man wondering through the pitch blackness of night
I raise up my hands not understanding the thing that I fight
A grasp so deep so strong it strangles my very breath
I pray but there is no hope of my fleshes death.
I want to escape to run into anything that will give me sanction
But everything that I do causes some negative chain reaction
Sorry I failed you, heck my own self I have constantly fail
Locked in a prison when someone has paid the bail
I know the words I know all the truths to be told
But they don’t reach my heart, just things my mind does hold
All I can say is somewhere insyde I am sorry for what I have done
Not that those things could ever possibly be undone
So what remains of the relationship two people once had
Is there anything that can resurrect it or has it really gotten that bad
I’m sorry for the words I say I hope you know that really I do mean it
I guess I’m just running through a time where I don’t see anything as being fit
Nothing seems to be going my way everything is wrong
I look and look but I don’t see were I belong
A million faces no personalities
A million spaces of reckless casualties
A mind is a terrible thing to waste
But the soul is even worse to waste.
Yet I allow mine to waste away
Like I said before my self-inflicted decay
So now will I rise up or will I fall down
Will I turn around or continue to look like a clown
I don’t know I can’t understand my present day man
I guess I’ll continue on doing everything that I can.
But how long I can continue I don’t quite know for sure
I just hope I find something for this cancer a final cure.


Ok this is an older poem I hope you guys liked it





[This message has been edited by the_rescue (edited 06-01-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-06-01 10:19 AM


this is very powerful but VERY hard to read when in all CAPS  
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2 posted 2001-06-01 10:30 AM


It is kinda hard to read in all caps,Its a good poem, but it kind of lost my intrest after the the part about being in prison when the bail was paid, but it didnt lose my intrest because it was bad, cause its good, not bad! But its kinda depressing, and today is my birthday...i'll read it again tomorrow..
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3 posted 2001-06-01 10:43 AM


sorry it was the font you guys lol.  
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4 posted 2001-06-02 03:55 AM


I enjoyed this. Found it to be very powerful, like the others said....and what can we say? This poem really hits you hard. I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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5 posted 2001-06-03 01:30 AM


A very powerful poem...niceeeeee  
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6 posted 2001-06-03 12:03 PM


quite the powerful piece...great job on writing this...i enjoyed this greatly...bye

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7 posted 2001-06-03 03:02 PM


very nice. i usually avoid the long ones cuz it doesn't keep my attention but this one did. i like it a lot. good job

Valerie

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8 posted 2001-06-03 03:25 PM


This is a very good piece The rescue and I enjoyed it loads although don't put read this after your title because it sounds a bit desperate...
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9 posted 2001-06-03 03:29 PM


im speechless

*presses library button*

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10 posted 2001-06-04 04:00 AM



Errr... well I'll try to avoid useing the word "powerful" as you are probably sick of reading it..!!

This poem took a few reads to fully apreciate, but I'm glad I took the time.  It is a beautifully sad piece (is that a contradiction or what?!),  I don't know what all the others are talking about, about it being hard to read..?!

but anyway.  It made me stop, it made me think, and it made me realise that there are other people are out there thinking the way I'm thinking.  If only I could express it as well as you did with your words...

Keep writing.  You have a talent.

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11 posted 2001-06-04 04:01 AM



Errr... well I'll try to avoid useing the word "powerful" as you are probably sick of reading it..!!

This poem took a few reads to fully apreciate, but I'm glad I took the time.  It is a beautifully sad piece (is that a contradiction or what?!),  I don't know what all the others are talking about, about it being hard to read..?!

but anyway.  It made me stop, it made me think, and it made me realise that there are other people are out there thinking the way I'm thinking.  If only I could express it as well as you did with your words...

Keep writing.  You have a talent.

-Wood_Stock-


there is a beginning and there is an end.  Choose which you want to focus on.

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