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| Teen Poetry #4 |
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Innocence Lost (read this) |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
Innocence Lost So now my innocence is lost gone a memory of the past I searched but I could find nothing to fill the void so vast. I am consumed with self nothing greater than me It’s brought me down and kept me from being free So I sit I cry I laugh and don’t try My own rebellion leads me to die. Staggering I don’t want to let go, cant let go of what I’ve gripped But my time rages on and I’m slowly being stripped Stripped of my dignity and all of my hope I rage on seeking something to help me cope. Like the blind man wondering through the pitch blackness of night I raise up my hands not understanding the thing that I fight A grasp so deep so strong it strangles my very breath I pray but there is no hope of my fleshes death. I want to escape to run into anything that will give me sanction But everything that I do causes some negative chain reaction Sorry I failed you, heck my own self I have constantly fail Locked in a prison when someone has paid the bail I know the words I know all the truths to be told But they don’t reach my heart, just things my mind does hold All I can say is somewhere insyde I am sorry for what I have done Not that those things could ever possibly be undone So what remains of the relationship two people once had Is there anything that can resurrect it or has it really gotten that bad I’m sorry for the words I say I hope you know that really I do mean it I guess I’m just running through a time where I don’t see anything as being fit Nothing seems to be going my way everything is wrong I look and look but I don’t see were I belong A million faces no personalities A million spaces of reckless casualties A mind is a terrible thing to waste But the soul is even worse to waste. Yet I allow mine to waste away Like I said before my self-inflicted decay So now will I rise up or will I fall down Will I turn around or continue to look like a clown I don’t know I can’t understand my present day man I guess I’ll continue on doing everything that I can. But how long I can continue I don’t quite know for sure I just hope I find something for this cancer a final cure. Ok this is an older poem I hope you guys liked it  [This message has been edited by the_rescue (edited 06-01-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is very powerful but VERY hard to read when in all CAPS  |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
It is kinda hard to read in all caps,Its a good poem, but it kind of lost my intrest after the the part about being in prison when the bail was paid, but it didnt lose my intrest because it was bad, cause its good, not bad! But its kinda depressing, and today is my birthday...i'll read it again tomorrow..  ±Ålyssa± |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
sorry it was the font you guys lol. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this. Found it to be very powerful, like the others said....and what can we say? This poem really hits you hard. I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
A very powerful poem...niceeeeee |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
quite the powerful piece...great job on writing this...i enjoyed this greatly...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-03-2001).] |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
very nice. i usually avoid the long ones cuz it doesn't keep my attention but this one did. i like it a lot. good job Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is a very good piece The rescue and I enjoyed it loads although don't put read this after your title because it sounds a bit desperate... Zu |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
im speechless *presses library button* "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
Errr... well I'll try to avoid useing the word "powerful" as you are probably sick of reading it..!! This poem took a few reads to fully apreciate, but I'm glad I took the time. It is a beautifully sad piece (is that a contradiction or what?!), I don't know what all the others are talking about, about it being hard to read..?! but anyway. It made me stop, it made me think, and it made me realise that there are other people are out there thinking the way I'm thinking. If only I could express it as well as you did with your words... Keep writing. You have a talent. |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
Errr... well I'll try to avoid useing the word "powerful" as you are probably sick of reading it..!! This poem took a few reads to fully apreciate, but I'm glad I took the time. It is a beautifully sad piece (is that a contradiction or what?!), I don't know what all the others are talking about, about it being hard to read..?! but anyway. It made me stop, it made me think, and it made me realise that there are other people are out there thinking the way I'm thinking. If only I could express it as well as you did with your words... Keep writing. You have a talent. -Wood_Stock- there is a beginning and there is an end. Choose which you want to focus on. |
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