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Where the Pain Fades Away
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Where the Pain Fades Away |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677
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Normally as I reminisce about my life I can think only about the bad things As if all of my fun times never happened As if all the good memories have been lost But I have found a place Deep within myself A place that I can only go to When I am away from everyone A place where my broken heart mends Where my scared soul heals And the pain fades away A place where I can be myself Where I can smile and laugh And the only tears falling Are those of happiness No one can disturb me here No matter how hard they try But each and every time I leave It gets harder to say goodbye *~*Amanda*~* My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it... [This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (edited 06-01-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Where my scared soul heals ..... wow...i love the imagery you used in this one...i loved the ending too..well done on this...i enjoyed it muchly! 
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is a good one. I know how you feel about the harsh life thing. Well, at least as far as school was concnerned. You did misspell a few words, like reminisce, wrong. However, on the whole, this was a good poem. That twist at the end was quite well done. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is very good writing....I know the way this feels |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"But each and every time I leave It gets harder to say goodbye" beautiful poem...i to be honest loved the way it way its written...i enjoyed this greatly ...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This was very good altogether... the place deep within yourself was a neat concept.  I hope you keep your head high, write when you are in that state of mind and share with us always. Great work here. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done on this one. I felt the sadness here. Very emotional poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
let the power conquer over the good! I know its hard hun but do your best for us hehehe...i really liked it..nice job! |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
aww great poem i loved it so much and can relate to it! *click* into library.....hehe Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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