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dramaqueen22086 Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 50Hadlyme, CT |
this is really dumb, i had to write it for class, so i only had like 10 min. this was the best i could come up with. oh well...  ~!kellie!~  Bump, Bump I hate this so much, the same thing every day Every morning getting up early just so I can make it Then when I’m on it, that’s the time I lay Why is it all the same? Some of the kids think it’s real keen But not me I hate it Bump, bump Why are they so mean? Why does it have to be, the same thing every day? Bump, bump, oh I hate it And I have to ride it all the way Why does it have to be? On the way home is the moment I lean Next to the window As I hit my head on every bump Why am I only 15?  |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
that's cute, lol. I like it! but it could definatly improve.  STace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hehe...cute poem...i enjoyed the read...thanks  ...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hehe, riding the bus can be tiresome, I know. I'm 16 and I'm still working on getting my license, so I guess we're on the same boat for awhile. Good piece. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This wasn't bad. But don't wish to grow up too bad. I wish I could go back a few years. Now I have bills,college,blah,blah,blah. I wish I could be 15 again sometimes. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
kel im with you..our bus sucks royally...those ppl ar evil lol j.p but yeah..you betcha butt your driving me to school when ya get your lisence, nah ya dont gotta but i wouldnt mind cute poem hun~*KiMMiE* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I like this... great use of onomatopeia.  The tone is really quizzical and goofy, kudos on that aspect of this. I hope you get an A+! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very expressive....kind of a ranting poem. I enjoyed it....you got your feelings out there. Not your best, I'll say that, but nonetheless a wonderful read. I hope you do get a good grade!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I used to ride the bus too...for one year....ugh...at least my buss driver was cool and we got the music loud SEA |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I never took the bus to school...am i missing out on n e thing!? This poem was really cute tho...not dumb!!! Dont say that tsk tsk tsk hehehe |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
aww this was really cute!! i could never think of a good poem like this in 10 mins goshes!! Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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