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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-05-31 05:00 PM

As the world turns upside down
my heart fills with nothingness
the weather changes just like
the life i thought i had
let me shrug you away from me
you weren't suppose to care
you were suppose to hate me
just leave me alone
stop worrying about me
you shouldnt waste your time
dont you know i'm just a fly
buzzing against a closed window
slowly dying

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-31 05:11 PM

interetsing read this was for me...i liked it, ina

...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-31-2001).]

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-05-31 05:20 PM

That was really good Regina. The ending was bad ass!
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-06-01 11:58 AM

Ah! This is a very, very good poem. The title is perfect, the tone is perfect, the ending... perfect.
Who knew you'd have two poems in my library today?

Well you do, and this is the second one.
I really, really, really like this poem.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-06-01 11:59 AM

I'm the second reply...
Just pretend I'm not here...

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

5 posted 2001-06-01 04:25 PM

~regina~
hey i liked this one, yay. it's goin in my library too..i finally figured out how to add stuff lol. yay 4 me, and yay 4 your poem. the ending on this was really good...this whole thing is a creative mass of yayness. (notice my overuse of the word 'yay') well byyyyye
-fear-

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-06-02 02:30 PM

I enjoyed this a lot. You wrote this one with such sad tones in it. Man O man.....the fly dying was an image that made my eyes water....

I liked this one regi.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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