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Sweey Sixteen |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
This is a poem about society today and how much someone could have to go through by the time they hit 16... Stripping at the local bar To get something to eat Selling herself for money On the corner of the street. She's been through more than you have She's a pregnant run away Her boy knocked her up and left her Just happy he got laid... And unless you can count dealing As a job to depend on, She's got no future for herself And no way to raise her son. So from now until she's gone This is how her life will be A homeless, dealing, mother, Happy Sweet Sixteen. |
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baby0508 Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 58Moodus, Connecticut |
britt..you are crazy!!j/k. ya know i luv ya, but i dunno where that came from. anyway, don't forget to PRY!!!! talk to ya later..good job! ~sis~ |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
awww, that's sad...  I don't know what I'd do if my life were like that at when I turned 16. of course, i don't have to worry too much about it. I turn 17 this year. but, I like this poem, as depressing as it is, and I think I'm gonna add it to my library.  Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done on this one. I liked it a lot...  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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dramaqueen22086 Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 50Hadlyme, CT |
hey britt, it's kel, i liked this poem alot, is it about anyone you know, it sounds like someone i know, but there aren't in that bad of shape,  you know what im talking about. well, anyways im in the libary, bored out of my mind, so i thought i'd read some of my buds peoms. your is the 1st ojne i've read today, and i think it was a godd one to start off with, b/c i think it's really good, i wish i had as much talent as you, kim, or nikki. all three of you are really good at this poem stuff, and mine always come out like crap. oh well, maybe you guys can teach my somthing some time, i'll see you in flash's class next, luv ya  ~!kellie!~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!...quite powerful and sad...i love the way you told this  ...great job...enjoyed greatly...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
haha..you gosta love alberta with his waving smileiy huh?....sad poem britt..i know it sounds cliched and all but i guess it does happen to ppl at some point in their lives...sad...good job on the poem though...nice message too...ill keep a look out for more of your poems...
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little_krazy_poet Junior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 41 |
this was good if you really read the end i kinda is a smack in the face about the world today it was good keep up the good work |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
It's the truth about the world today. There's a whole nother side too. The side where when you walk down the streets, people pull a knife on you and wave it in your face. The side where the guys grab you as you walk down the hallway. The side where no one cares if you're crying, just as long as you're not bleeding on the carpet. It's a sad world we live in today. So sad. Anyways, good poem. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
I honestly liked that poem, it's true. Thats how girls live to feed them selvs. Have you ever herd of the song by "City High"? it's really sad it shows boys and girls about having a baby and dancing for money. Learning how to walk, Learning how to talk, are the hardest thing to do in a baby life. Learning how to walk for me is the hardest thing to do. |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
Yup, actually, that's my favorite song. I'm glad you guys liked this poem... It's one of my favorites. I just think it's tough to watch someone you love go through something like this, and even harder if you've ever experienced it yourself... thanx again. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's nice to see a warning for younger teens to be more responsible growing up. I already responded to the duplicate page, but I'll still say that this is a wonderful poem keep it up Britt~Britt hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Allan, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michele, |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is very sad....the worst is, she has other options....the first thing should have been to do it "Safe"....pay attention ladies....... |
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