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sexychick Junior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 19Michigan, Bay City |
Why Why do you love her if all you're gonna do is love another Why do you kiss her if all you're gonna do is kiss another Why do you do so many things to her, if all you're gonna do is find another. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I like this--short sweet and to the point.  Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
ouch.....but totally true....this is a definite library piece....short and with a punch....straightforward.....awesome!!!!!! congrats! Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
ouch lol that was really good I liked the bluntness of it so to speak. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done....short and to the point. I sense a lot of heartache in this one. Well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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sexychick Junior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 19Michigan, Bay City |
Hey thanxs everyone for reading my poem this was my first poem i had ever wrote and i just wanted to share it with you great people here at passions. |
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corey14 Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 89Boston, Mass, U.S.A. |
nice poem keep writing live a little everyday and when its all over you will have lived a lot |
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dramaqueen22086 Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 50Hadlyme, CT |
hey hun, i know what your saying i hate when guys are like that, jumping from one girl to another, but that only the jerks in the world, there are guys like my chris that aren't like that... it gets better ~!kellie!~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
thje message was clear...and you wrote it well in such a short poem...great job...very true  ...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
playas they gonna play...(ssrry that song was just on) this was short and to the point, good job *KiMMiE* |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
whoa! this is the perfect poem for Jeremy Walls. thanks  ± Ålyssa ± |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
concise and sucinct..arent they kinda the same thing?..yeah i agree with the rest here...good poem!!..show it to him!
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
Wow you got the message out so clearly! beautiful write Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Interesting. Never seen a poem written like this. It was very blunt, and I like blunt. Good job. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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sexychick Junior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 19Michigan, Bay City |
Hey everyone thanxs so much im glad you liked the poem but, i didn't write it about me, i wrote it for a friend because this guy she really liked had dumped her because he doesn't go out with ppl for no longer then a month and she was heart broken so i wrote. well thanxs |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I like how the lines were the same at each end, but different in between. Creative... to say the very least. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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