Teen Poetry #4 |
.....?\"Take my Soul away..."[ the 2000th post!!!!! ] |
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sorry, its a quick write... i should of posted a better poem for my 2000th, but... Can you breathe?…can you!…I cant So let me be!…let me?…continue to die Cause the past haunts me... Cause the present kills me... Cause the future blinds me... Searching for love…wishing I’ll find this day. But no one ever understands my heart... But no one ever acknowledges my soul... As in hope life will get better…but do I really? As in hopeless I do live…but am I really? So what is life?…as sometimes I pray... that I won’t constantly live in pain... then go buried in the ground as dust in vain. But can anyone come and take my soul away... Is there anyone that truly cares for my soul to stay... As I carry on not knowing…as I hold on not knowing... Cause the past haunts me... Cause the present kills me... Cause the future blinds me... And this is what it was…and still is…this is my life. And this is what it was…and still is…this is my life. May.31...hope you guys like it and reply...bye i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-02-2001).] |
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n e where Junior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 32Australia |
aww what a sad poem...but very well written oh and congrats on the 2000th post thing! v cool ~I'd rather see the world from another angle~ Jewel. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
awwwwwww, Albert!! I like this poem. congrats on 2000. I hope you stay for 4000 more. Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here.......hello Mr. Elite. I enjoyed the poem. The ending...perfect. Yes, this is your life! And this is mine...and that one is hers....and we live with it. Well done! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
CONGRATULATIONS ON 2000 Albert and a great poem Zu |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
wow that was actually really cool i like it a lot, nice one al. Peace THe Rescue |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Congrats on 2000!!!! I really like this piece... some really deep statements here, my friend. Thought provoking and deep, just what a poem should be Thanks for sharing. "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Great job on the poem. i could relate to this. congrats on the 2000 It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww alberta!!!......*HUGS*...i love this poem..i can relate 100% to it..you know that..*hugs*....this is going through the printer right now... ...i loved it... muah!
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Congratulations!!!! Albertia, you always write these pieces that come straight from your heart and stab me in mine. Quit that already, will you! It's a great poem to be your 2000th. Well done on reaching it. ~AF~ Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You hit 2000 without warning! Man, you move fast! Congrats on elite status! You've already made a huge impact on all of us here! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
*raises hand* 2000 was last year... hehe. I'm bad. Good job on the 2000th! YAY!!! *has to try to beat that now, hehe* |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey lol when i first read this poem i was like "huh?" but then i read it over and actually understood it. yay for my childlike logic. congrats on ur 2000th post :-) -fear- |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is incredibly complex. Your form is really unique and i liked your diction. As everyone else has reiterated, CONGRATS!! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I don't know why you don't like this as your 2000th cause I'm very very impressed. You have done really good, so keep it up. keep sharing I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
*sigh* I miss you... Consider yourself added to the hitlist. |
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