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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-05-30 12:55 PM


I enjoy every minute with you
you make the gray skies seem blue
but there came a day you left for another
it made me ask why did I bother

I tried to keep you by my side
I even let you on the insyde
but it was to little to late

I stared at the clock as I saw time fly by
but our time was gone like the blink of an eye
I saw you laugh, saw you cry, and loved your smile
the time with you mades the pain worth while

I watched you leave my side
I still kept you insyde
but it was to little to late

You called me last night
said hey stranger you doing alright
neither one of us had much to say
but the feelings were suddenly in my way.

I know your not by my side
I still keep you on the insyde
but it remains to little to late.

You shattered and broke my heart
took it and just tore it apart
you held my heart in your hand
yet you dropped it I don't understand.

I wanted you by my side
I couldn't get you out of the insyde
it's still to little to late.

So here I sit and I still wait
the thought of us still up for debate
I don't know what exactly to do
because I want but can't have you

I hope to see you by my side
I know you'll always remain insyde
but is it to little to late.

You see I loved you, maybe not the moment we met
but the love I feel I cannot and will not forget
you mean so much to me
I'd give you the world if it would help you see

I want you by my side
it's an undescribable feeling insyde
is it to little to late

We tried it once, twice so what's the harm
they say that three times is a charm
or could it be three strikes and your out
I'd take the chance to find this out

Do you still want to be by my side
Do you want me to keep you insyde
or is it to little to late

Ok this one means a lot to me it's about this girl that I totally adore and as you can tell she left me for another but I'd take her back in aheart beat

The Rescue

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punkrockerrobin
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1 posted 2001-05-30 01:11 PM


what's bout me? man as soon as i get my car i'm going on a road trip!love ya babe and you i always will!
robin

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-05-30 01:14 PM


The ones that walk away always hurt the most. Your format and rhyme scheme were really good.

Keep your chin up.  

~AF~

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

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3 posted 2001-05-30 04:03 PM


omg i love this. it was soooooooooooooooooo good. and even tho i am a girl, i can still relate to your point of view because you never said girl, she, etc in it. i love poems that are versatile like this one... it makes it easier to relate cuz u dont' have ot be a guy or a girl     EXCELLENT job i love the rhyming. nice flow, etc. all around cool poem!!!       p.s. watch ur spelling... insyde-inside


Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

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4 posted 2001-05-30 07:32 PM


your wrote this well...i enjoyed the emotions you expressed...and its  sad situation and hope things work out best for you  

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the_rescue
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5 posted 2001-05-30 08:16 PM


Hey I like the whole insyde thing thanks lol plus it's an insyde joke with the girl

[This message has been edited by the_rescue (edited 05-30-2001).]

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6 posted 2001-05-30 08:28 PM


this was really good. sorry *hugs*hope u feel better soon.

fall hard, practice harder not to fall

Deranger
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7 posted 2001-05-30 08:37 PM


Nice poem, but watch that girl...Once a cheater, always a cheater.  That's so hard to come to grips with...  Don't delude reality, take it straight...

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LoneWolf
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8 posted 2001-05-30 11:05 PM


WOW, i absolutly loved this. i can relate this poem so much. This was great, its going to my library. hope to see more.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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9 posted 2001-05-31 02:23 AM


Well done on this one.
I liked it.....and I know how this feels.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

cherish
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10 posted 2001-05-31 02:35 AM


ok firstly i gosta commend you on your format and rhyme scheme!!!...excellent job on that!...i loved it through out the whole thing!...brilliant job on it  ..secondly i loved the poem....it told the story so well..i loved the way it changed slightly to suit what you were feeling...especially with the "inside" parts..i thought that that was ingeniuous (sp?)...loved the poem ...loved the read...got any more???hahah..more says i!




"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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11 posted 2001-05-31 02:39 AM


okays to me this read like a song! and i liked that muchs i think you did a wonderful job on this JimmAy! lols i noticed one lil pluralized word in thereS:P
*does the jimmAy bes talkin likes me dance*
newayz...this is just great and tis in me librarys!
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

Just leave me alone and give me some space.

the_rescue
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12 posted 2001-05-31 08:28 AM


hey once again thnx for the welcome and such
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13 posted 2001-06-02 03:48 AM


I think you did a great job with this...very expressive!    ~SEA
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14 posted 2001-06-02 04:01 AM


this one made robin mad for certain reasons!

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

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