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branden726
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0 posted 2001-05-30 09:09 PM


My love for her,
was never felt before
she sat there with her eyes
Twinkling in the sun
I never thought you would come to me
A gift is what you are to me
Please take my hand and please be mine
Forever and ever untill our hearts untwine

© Copyright 2001 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
fozzyozzy
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1 posted 2001-05-30 10:18 PM


Do you want the truth?  This poem......rocks! NOt rusty at all actually.  Short but gets the message nonetheless.  GJ

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
Robert Fr

knightlyshadows
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obscured vision
2 posted 2001-05-30 10:27 PM


aww this was lovely! great job on it. if this is about someone..i hope you showed her.
best of luck!
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

Just leave me alone and give me some space.

LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10
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IL
3 posted 2001-05-30 10:48 PM


great job, i loved the poem.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

n e where
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4 posted 2001-05-30 10:51 PM


this is such a sweet lil poem :p
keep postin'

~I'd rather see the world from another angle~ Jewel.

stace_co2003
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In a dream world
5 posted 2001-05-30 10:54 PM


I hope you sent this to her, that's so sweet!!

and I agree that this is not rusty at all!
hope to read more soon!
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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6 posted 2001-05-31 02:18 AM


Well done here branden! I liked this one a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
7 posted 2001-05-31 02:52 AM


awwwwwww short but oh so sweet...enough to make the heart melt.. ...i agree with the rest..i hope you showed this to her!!!!




"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

sexychick
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8 posted 2001-05-31 06:51 AM



Hey branden great job its a really good poem and i do really think you should show it to her she will just die because its absolute cute you did a great job and i know you always have and will.
        

branden726
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9 posted 2001-05-31 07:03 AM


^^For everyone to know well this is for her up there yep the one above me and yes she was the first to see it you guys i got to be honest with you i wanted to quit writting but she Stopped me! She told me i couldnt she helped me back up and well this is what came to mind...Thanks hun *8 months and still there* Thanks guys i appreciate it alot.

*Tears of love*
*Tears of faith*
*Never any Tears of hate*

SEA
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with you
10 posted 2001-06-02 04:06 AM


this is wonderfully sweet   ~SEA
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