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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
dont know if this makes sense or not...but there it is newayz... i heard you crying all alone a call for help with chances slim i heard you dying in the dark a womb of protection from yourself i heard you asking 'why me?' an unanswerable question asked anyways i heard you whispering 'God, save me' a question of trust or a plee of mercy i heard you saying 'thank you, God' a mircale sent when chances were slim “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wow this was great..i love the flow it had..i was reading it aloud and it sounded great!!...i love the repetition ..and the conclusion it had..  ..great job on this one |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
A happy ending, those are nice every once in a while. I really like your work. Keep posting. "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here tiff but not your best. Still a good read!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i enjoyed the read ...great job...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
tiffs that was awesomes! keep writting. robin  I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I liked it, I liked it!! (hey mikey, hey mikey!) sorry, lol. I like this poem. I really do. it's cute. and I agree with Cherish, it flows so well.  Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
great job on this one Tiffy girl |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
this was really sad  Great job on it |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
loved this poem it was great!! Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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Shyan Junior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 10Canada |
Hey Tiff, well been a while since I been on here.........just cuz you know got al busy and stuff. That poem was great, better than anything I can do. Keep ur chin up girlly hope to hear from you sometime. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I gleaned several different messages from this poem. One was with regards to abortion. Although I do not agree with the notion of intelligence on the part of a foetus, this still conveyed that same message that Peretti's Tilly conveyed. I also gleaned a message of hope for patients with debilitating disseases. Perhaps the poem described one such patient. Finally, I gleaned a message of hope for those afflicted with sociological and psychological problems. Perhaps it was addressed to a person on the streets, living in complete defiance, but at the same time scared to death of the future and of the world around him/her. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Evylyn Junior Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 20Florida, USA |
*Sniffles* That was sad, Tiff. Here I was thinking you were all perky! *Pokes you* Though, I suppose our inner thoughts are best conveyed through poetry. Anyways, I liked it. You're a much more in depth person than I perceived you to be. (I'm not saying you're shallow! Just happy!) *Phew~* Don't hurt me for that one! Keep up the great composing! "The only thing that boggles the mind is the mind itself." |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
As did fractal007- My first thought was abortion. And like Fracta- I don't think the fetus thinks...Just my opinion though. Anyway- Nice poem. [This message has been edited by Spice (edited 06-08-2001).] |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
yeah i thought of abortion as well... but maybe that's because i'm such an... activist or something  good job tiff! I liked it a lot. you are so tallented. jo But His word was in my heart |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Faith is definitely one thing people should keep no matter how hard it is ti hang on to. Beautiful write Tiff. keep it up hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
Nice This Is Not Here |
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never_a_princess Member
since 2001-06-09
Posts 82Show Me the Money |
Tifferage! short but sweet..i like it! it's very thoughtful..much more in depth than it might first appear..and, sorries, i dint think of abortion.*hehe*..anyways, great poem..it makes sense..to mez :-P *hugz* luv ya girly! ~Anna *waves* |
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