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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
At night when everyone else is asleep I stay awake and and sadly weep It hurts to know I'm all alone With no one's arms to call my own When I go out, I put on a show To hide my feelings, so no one else will know I have given my heart, and payed the price It's amazing what can happen in the roll of a dice The hurt inside, eats away at me so slow So I now have no wishes, no dreams, or no goals I long to find someone who loves me for me Who will not try to chage me, They will excect what they truly see. But untill then, misrable I will stay Hoping my dream boy will find me one day |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ashley, I think you should learn to give yourself a bit more credit than you seem to be. Like I've told you before, it's not healthy to depend on someone that you haven't even met yet. You should learn to put some faith in yourself, learn to respect yourself a little more. Keep your chin high. You've got friends like me, and everyone else, for when times get rough. And as for love, you are only still young. Welcome to Passions in Poetry. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this hit me hard...so much truth in these words i realted to the whole poem...awesome job and a great read...i loved it to be honest..and hey i know its hard...isnt it?..yea and i hope you are strong enough to last trhough your pains as i am doing  ...and thanks for the read...i enjoyed this greatly  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i agree with allan on this one. it isn't healthy to define yourself by someone else. you are a talented writer and i hope at some point you won't feel like you need to depend on someone else. you wrote this beautifully though, you put a lot of yourself into this piece. keep sharing all your work with us. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is touching...and I know what you meant here...I was there once too...you'll find him....or he'll find you...when the time is right....  hang in there SEA |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
he'll find you. don't worry, he may be around the next turn wherever you look he may be there. don't define yourself by a view of someone else. love peace and eyeliner angel -x- |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Are we connected at the brain somehow?? I feel the EXACT same way and think the EXACT same thing all the time! This was great, I really like it! Especially since I feel the same way you do... nice work!   ,Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem! I really enjoyed this one and I wish you the best of luck with the man.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I hope you find your dream boy one day too...but as for the poem it was extremely sad but packed with emotion. Excellent job i really enjoyed this...::hugs:: |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I do agree with Allan, and you should never put your entire happiness on a man/relationship. But I understand longing, and you will hopefully one day find that special guy. Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 05-22-2001).] |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
I'm with Allan. Give yourself a little moe credit hun. He'll find you.... ~britt~ |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I liked this piece alot, and it was most definitely something that I could relate to. Thank you for sharing this piece with us, it's going in my library and I truly hope that things work out for you. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I liked this piece alot, and it was most definitely something that I could relate to. Thank you for sharing this piece with us, it's going in my library and I truly hope that things work out for you. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I liked this piece alot, and it was most definitely something that I could relate to. Thank you for sharing this piece with us, it's going in my library and I truly hope that things work out for you. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That's a really beautiful write. You will find him one of these days, just be patient. keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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