Teen Poetry #4 |
weep from the pain |
Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
i weep from the pain of dismembered hearts i watch as you take it and rip me apart you say your just kidding and its only in jest well the pain i feel real and so is the blood i bleed and yet you see my blood and you laugh or simply ignore and i weep from the pain of my dismembered heart i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
wow, I'm sorry, I hope things get better for you. keep your chin up and just keep smiling *s* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
you're the best writer ben i just wish you had something happier to write about hun. |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
this was good, very heart felt i think, keep writing, -ab *~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~* |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this goes right to the heart of it....I liked this SEA |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sad...you said it well...graet job and hope things are better i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done. I really liked this one. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
know how you feel and its awful...::hugs:: |
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never_a_princess Member
since 2001-06-09
Posts 82Show Me the Money |
i like the theme "i weep from the pain" and how you used it near the beginning and the end. *likes this one* not as good as others, but still really goodish! *hugz* ~Anna *waves* |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
nice write man I hope it gets better you know Rescue ps if you need to talk to anyone I am here but then again I might not be technically here anyways you know what I mean in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this one, Ben. I'm sorry that you feel this way... *hugs* Email me sometime if you ever need to talk. I enjoyed this poem. I hope you feel better. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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takemeawaytoday Junior Member
since 2001-04-30
Posts 13Missouri |
great poem hope to hear more from you about it |
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