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Teen Poetry #4

The Wood_Stock Collection : School Days

Wood_Stock
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since 2001-05-09

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The little yellow

0 posted 2001-05-29 03:12 AM

- School days -

In one ear, out the other,
Meaningless words, why do I bother?
Try to understand, when nothing makes sense,
Information can't make it through, this mental fence.

I don't want to know, can't understand why,
The fact is I'm too lazy, I don't want to try.
Forgotten how to listen, forgotten how to learn,
Try to think for myself, but inside my mind, it burns.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-29 03:24 AM

very different...i liked it...thanks for the read

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-29 03:45 AM

Well done on this one. I really liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-05-30 06:53 AM

School tends to do that to you. You've expressed yourself well.

Good job.

~AF~

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

4 posted 2001-05-31 11:38 AM

I like this poem. very good job...

Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-06-01 11:41 AM

I think the title is very good in this poem... it sort of prepares the reader to read something innocent and light-hearted in a way. However the twist caught me by complete surprise, and I like that a lot.

This poem overall works very well because of how short it is, the message is compressed. Good work.

Oh and I like the consonance in line four.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

6 posted 2001-06-04 01:49 AM

oh wow..this was great...especially the last line..i enjoyed it very much thank you noel!!!....my brain always turns to mush whenever its got sumthing to do with learning hahaha...good stuff keeping a lookout for more of your work..more says i!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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