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little_krazy_poet
Junior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 41

0 posted 2001-05-28 11:03 PM

i'm back it's been like 4 or 5 months since i last posted because i've been in and out of hospitals for depression but i've been let out and i'm free so i hope you like my poetry and well just tell me what you think

one thing
this that
that’s life
like a rat

everything is
tricky and cunning
the only way out
get up and start running

confused
not what it really is
it’s like having soda
without the fizz

people are boring
mixed up
emotions can be held
in a small cup

living
not much
just surviving
and such

disappointing
to say the least
my anger
looks like a beast

entertainment
it’s not there
think of just looking
at a chair

is that what you think
ya this is me
trust me
it’s not what you see

this is all
what you will find
if you look through
the eyes of this brain of mine

well that was it. i wrote this a long time ago and your the first to see it

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-28 11:19 PM

i liked it...great job on the poem...and im glad that you got some help as i hope you are doing well...and welcome back and hope tos e more of you around here

...keep writing

...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-29 02:22 AM

Well you're not a new member, but Welcome back to Passions!
I enjoyed this poem.

check your e-mail for a special message!
Dopey_Dope/Moderator

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-05-30 06:37 AM

It is great to see you again! I hope you are feeling a lot better. I missed reading your stuff.

Everything you have written here makes so much sense.

Thanks for the read and I'll be looking for more.

~AF~

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

4 posted 2001-05-30 08:07 PM

WELCOME K lil Poet!!!

this was an interesting piece!!..all emotions can fit inside a cup?....wow....i loved the imagery you were able to form from your little lines...i loved the format...gave emphisis on the "bareness" of it all...overall i thought that this was a real good poem...

..i am a bit sad though at your ill health..so i do hope you're feeling much much better by the time you read this...

....keep posting!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

5 posted 2001-05-30 09:26 PM

i thought this was really good

i liked how it all ended up at how everything looks from ur brain. good job!

~ethel

~

Meggie1986
Junior Member

since 2001-05-22

Posts 41
California

6 posted 2001-05-30 10:36 PM

Welcome back. This is a very interesting piece. Very well written. I will look for more poems from you soon!

*One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it.

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

7 posted 2001-05-30 11:00 PM

good job, i liked this

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

8 posted 2001-05-30 11:04 PM

welcome back!!

I liked this piece..and I'm glad you are OK now. I hope things get better for you!!

Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-06-04 10:54 PM

Welcome back hun! Im glad to hear that you are OK now and you got help

Good to see ya back!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-06-08 11:18 AM

Welcome back!!! Nice to see you grace us with your presence again. keep sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

11 posted 2001-06-08 11:22 AM

Hey I'm glad to see things are a little better.

Bel

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

12 posted 2001-06-08 11:45 AM

i loved this poem it was great

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

Dr. Jo-Bizz
Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 97

13 posted 2001-06-09 12:58 PM

wow... the comparisons you made and stuff was really neat-o...
depression sucks. litterally. it just sucks the... stuffing right out of you... Im glad you're better and i hope you never have to go through that much crap again.

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

14 posted 2001-06-16 02:45 PM

Welcome back. I'm glad to see you posting again... you were missed.
I enjoyed this poem a lot, and I look forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing

And again, welcome back to pipTalk!

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection. Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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