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sexychick
Junior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 19
Michigan, Bay City

0 posted 2001-05-28 05:26 PM

you were a great as a bf along time ago, but things change, people change. i grew older and so did you, i went to high school and your finishing this year. i feel in love and have found the one that makes me happy. you just kept getting hurt. then you came back to me and begged me to love you and to be with you, but how can i when i dont love you anymore.
i have found the one now im asking you to stop the calling, stop the pain you put me through. if you really want to be here for me and be apart of me you would leave me alone. so now i say get out just go an get out of my life.

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

1 posted 2001-05-28 05:37 PM

Ouch! Great poem, good luck
Bel
Btw, Welcome to Passions

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

2 posted 2001-05-28 05:38 PM

wow....
welcome!!!
but I have to say, you did a supurb job on this..

hope to hear more from you very soon!!

*s*
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

3 posted 2001-05-28 05:39 PM

Hey Welcome to passions...Just to let everyone know this here is my friend The one i usually write about she is here to write and let out her feelings so plz treat her like you have me thanks

*Tears of love*
*Tears of faith*
*Never any Tears of hate*

sexychick
Junior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 19
Michigan, Bay City

4 posted 2001-05-28 07:04 PM

hey i would like to say thanxs for you guys to reply to my poems and i had a great time here on pasions but im sad to say im leaving but i will be reading your poems and telling what i think about them but wont be writing myself thanxs all and bye

sexychick
Junior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 19
Michigan, Bay City

5 posted 2001-05-28 07:05 PM

hey i would like to say thanxs for you guys to reply to my poems and i had a great time here on pasions but im sad to say im leaving but i will be reading your poems and telling what i think about them but wont be writing myself thanxs all and bye

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-05-28 08:33 PM

hi!

...welcome welcome welcome...great first post

...i liked the emotions in this poem...and the format was quite unque...thanks for sharing...and keep writing

...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-05-29 01:24 AM

Welcome to Passions!
I enjoyed this poem. Sounds like you really want that guy out of yer life. Good luck!

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kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

8 posted 2001-05-29 01:50 AM

welcome to passions!!

that was a powerful intense plea...good job

and do carry on writing...writing means a lot to me and i hate to see a fellow writer give it up

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

9 posted 2001-05-30 06:22 AM

Welcome to Passions

Definitely a big OUCH for this one. Just make it perfectly clear that you want him gone. They usually take the hint after one beating or two.

A suggestion, try breaking up the lines a bit so it reads easier and adds tons more feeling to it. Not to say that it doesn't already have alot in it but it will give it that extra something. Try it. I could be wrong.

Other than that, enjoy it here and I look forward to seeing your posts and replies.

~AF~

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-06-02 05:04 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Nice to see you join us here in Passions for Poetry. Hope you enjoy reading as well as sharing your own work. I see a powerful inner strangth in you. Your poems shows that, so keep writing and sharing.

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

11 posted 2001-06-02 05:28 PM

Your poem is great and I hope to read more of your poems.But always remember it is hard to say goodbye to someone.But anyway keep up the awsome work.
Lauren

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

12 posted 2001-06-02 06:35 PM

Welcome To Passions!

I liked ur first post and i cant wait to see more from you

welcome!!!!

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

13 posted 2001-06-16 02:43 PM

Welcome to Passions in Poetry.
Very nice work in the poem. I look forwrad to reading more posts and replies from you.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection. Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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