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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-05-28 08:10 PM

The Last Love

He called to his
friend in his last
minuits of life
A silhouette of a
man emerged from
the shadows, kneeling
by the bed
Life cut short by this
illness thats eats away
at his body after four
years of pills
his friend's one beautiful
now ravaged
his breath shallow
slowly vanishing
he knows it is time to
say good-bye
to his love
"Let go Eric, all will be
well"
"until we meet again"
Eric didn't hear him
he was already
gone.....

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

sexychick
Junior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 19
Michigan, Bay City

1 posted 2001-05-28 08:24 PM

hey this is a great poem im new here and i hope to read some more stuff of yours.

~lisa~

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-05-28 08:52 PM

i like the way you wrote this....quite powerful...great job and hope to see more

...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-05-29 01:30 AM

Wow regi.......extremely powerful piece here. I really liked this one. So full of sadness......man........this hit, and it hit hard.
Nicely done....one of my favs by you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

4 posted 2001-05-29 11:28 AM

Thanks both of you for your replies. I wrote this last year...after my uncle died of AIDS, for his friend......

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

5 posted 2001-05-30 07:01 AM

So sad. So very, very sad. You always bring out the emotions in me Regi. You are the queen of freeverse. It's an excellently written piece. In my library for sure!

~AF~

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

6 posted 2001-05-31 11:43 AM

that's really sad...
but it's good

STace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

7 posted 2001-06-01 11:47 AM

Oh, definitely an amazing piece... the ending is especially powerful, it is packed with sad emotions.
"Until we meet again." Wow, that was so... well, chivalrous, almost. Know what I mean?
What a powerful poem... another of Regina's work to grace my personal library.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

8 posted 2001-06-06 07:30 PM

This was so sad

Hope you feel better now

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