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CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2001-05-28 07:58 PM

Howdy! It's been a lil while since I've posted, so I figured I'd post this one. I wrote this Memorial Day Weekend up camping. It was inspired by the campfire. I'm not even sure that all of it will even make sense to you guys... Anyway, I definitely don't think that it's my best, but it's another different style than I'm used to. Let me know how it sounds!

THE FIRE IN MY HEART

The fire in my heart
Is burning for you
The kindling is starting
But you haven't a clue

The coals are turning red
But there still is no smoke
It's not love, but you're in my head
This feeling is far from a joke

When the flames rise
They can easily burn
And when love cries
That's easy to learn

Quickly, I put on more wood
As I felt strong pain
Far from the embers I stood
When it began to rain

- Cody -

Living From Memories
Living From Thoughts
There Are Some Things In Live
That Cannot Be Taught

[This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (edited 05-29-2001).]

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-28 08:46 PM

i like the imagery and sybolism...great job...i enjoyed this a lot...thanks for the read

...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

2 posted 2001-05-29 12:36 PM

like al said...imagery. i really enjoyed it. *Yells at rain to go away* GO BACK TO WHERE YOU CAME FROM!!!
*ahem*
Anyway...i also liked your use of personifications! (sorry, we're studying poetry right now in English...ahh...bliss...) Really effective.

Great work!

-chasing rain

"If I find in myself desires which nothing in this world can satisfy, the only logical explanation is that i was made for another world."
-C.S.Lewis

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-05-29 01:55 AM

Cody, well done on this one. Simply beautiful. I really liked this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2001-05-30 06:24 AM

Great work, Cody. Your last stanza was by far my favourite.

Thanks for the read.

~AF~

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

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