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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Controllable Geek I’m sorry I’m not your – stupid, weak, controllable geek I’m so sorry, I’m not worthy – to beg at your feet! You said, you loved me – you whispered it, just for my, benefit How dare you – how could you be so cruel, I’m not a subject, to be ruled How dare you – take my hand, just to lead me around—did I let you down- When I refused to be, abused, and you scream how you’re the one being, used! Beware, this geek’s not weak; this geek’s got teeth, and I’m digging into you! And, why, I ever sympathized for you, why I ever swore, oh I’d die for you! And, all this irony, you shove down my throat; I’m starting to cough- Starting to choke! See all this pain in me, and tell me honestly, your heart’s broke If I don’t care—why do I still need you to be there, why do I still want to taste your hair? How did you, poison me, so deeply—you burned me, like I didn’t have any skin Damn this obsession! Can’t be free, until you come back and finish me, have the decency- To kill me, ‘cause being buried alive…sure gets old, ye bearer of heart so cold Have the common decency, to come back and kill me You’ve helped me, set free, this evil in me – helped hatch, the egg Satan laid inside me And when, I conduct the orchestra of apocalypse, I promise to kiss your lips- One final time…just to remind, the evil you unleash, this calamity - you set free Before you join your friends, your family – the rest of doomed humanity The truth will break through, all your lies, and you’ll realize – it was you Yeah you, you…oh you…who they owe, Armageddon to. Spreading insanity, one post at a time My skull has glowing green eyes! [This message has been edited by Deranger (edited 05-28-2001).] |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
 Awwww What a great poem i love it... |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
that was really good. you put alot of emotion into it, but hate sucks man. it really does. keep your chin up and keep on smilin!! *s* Stace  I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very emotional poem...graet job!...i liked it and i bet cherish will love this poem..haha  ...anyways...thanks for the read  ...? i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-28-2001).] |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Is hate the absence of any love, or the presence of something truly evil? I can't figure this out. It perplexes me. Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done.......a part that really impressed me and hit me was "cause being buried alive…sure gets old" I really liked that part cuz it's so true. You wrote this one superbly! I enjoyed it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh WOW! This has amazed me beyond words! Ok, that's not actually possible but you know what I mean. It's filled with such anger that I can connect with it immediately. Thanks for such a fantastic read!  ~AF~ Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Personally I didn't think it was one of your best. It was great, any piece from you can't be described as anything else, but it lacked something. I don't know what. Yes there was a lot of emotion behind it, but I think it lacked 'passion'. That's just the way it seemed to me. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
WOW. this is so angry and so good. I like it! katie We all make mistakes. We all cause others pain. DEAL |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
that's so cool!!!! great use of...everything! love peace and eyeliner angel -x- tattoos of memories and dead skin on trial for what it's worth it was worth all the while - Green Day |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Dang this had a lotta emotion in it!!!!!!!!!! Impressive!!! Wonderful ::applauds:: |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
lol i think everyone else said everything ill just say  ......WOWDont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Deranger, the title intrigued me and this was a fantastic read...i very well felt the raw anger and anguish of the speaker and applaud your efforts... to be honest, i found the last stanza to be weaker than the rest...just my opinion... and simplistic me says hate is the presence of something evil because you can love and hate a person at the same time, yup... keep posting... |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
eeek.. ouch.. that sucks... dr. jo-bizz |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
Awesome job |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
OUCH this was awsome..i like the part "cause being buried alive…sure gets old" the best..very well written! i wanted to kill the sexiest person alive, but then i realized suicide is a crime!! :) |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow! This was jam packed with strong emotions expressed greatly! Amazing work! |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
THis was amzing. Wow. There was alot of hate in this piece. but still it was awesome. Regina |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Well, i don't hate this person anymore...in fact, i don't feel anything for her. I don't feel anything for anyone. I'm glad everyone likes it...i decided i hated a few things and changed them...though i really don't see a reason to update it now. Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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