Teen Poetry #4 |
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thoughts on a cliche |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore ![]() |
Nay, the grass may not be greenier on the other side but the sky is definitely bluer and the widened eyes turn resolutely unblinking All the better to absorb bliss with |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Cool! Really creative look on what we see as cliches. I liked this a lot. ![]() ~Carly "Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..." |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very creative...great imagery useage with meaning...i liekd it...thanks for sharing it and keep writing ![]() i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nicely done here....I really thought you did well on this one. Looking forward to more. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
great poem.... it was really great, and I hope to hear more!! or read more, whatever!! ![]() ![]() *s* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
I like this a lot! I always say that in poetry, you've got to avoid cliche like the plague.... ![]() "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you....while i was travelling, i was constantly amazed at how beautiful the skies were and how i never actually bothered to appreciate the skies back home... that led to this musing and yup, i strive to admire the clouds always ![]() ahh, the simple things in life... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Very nice. The clouds give the best inspiration for poems. Indeed, the simple things in life. ![]() Well done. ~AF~ Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
I'm laughing now.. this is so.. neat! ^_^ Enjoyed muchly Kai Le.. thanx for putting this link in the Poetry Haven.. “One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..” |
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branden726![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Well i must say this is a first ive ever read in passions :-/ well hey keep up the good work its a really good poem *Tears of love* |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you for your comments... |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
now this....is good ![]() ![]() |
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Meggie1986 Junior Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 41California |
Very nice outlook ![]() *One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it. |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
SEA and Meggie, i am glad you enjoyed this musing... ![]() [This message has been edited by faterider (edited 06-05-2001).] |
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Mon Cherie![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Yes, I realised that too. The grass might not be greener, but the skies are bluer!! ![]() Always so clear and cloudless here, that's the only thing I don't miss about home. ![]() |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hmmm, thinking of submitting this for Reflections |
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