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I thought of you today--
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I thought of you today-- |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world 
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I thought of you today-- Walking around the store I heard your favorite song, Went home and played it once more. I thought of you today-- I saw your picture on the wall, Saw the love in your face, And went crying down the hall. I thought of you today-- I read your favorite rhyme, It reflected your personality so, It seems as if it's gotten better with time. I thought of you today-- I talked to papaw on the phone, He cried over you, He cried because you aren't home. I thought of you today-- I saw a sky of the clearest blue, You loved the blue sky... And now, I do too. I think of you now-- And tears come to my eyes, I mourn the loss of my grandmother, It's never easy when someone you love dies. -------------------------------------------- It'll have been 3 years since my grandma died on October 9th....yet it feels like it was just yesterday.... I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
an emotional poem...written very well...great job and thanks for sharing a nice tribute  ...keep writing and hope to see more  ...?i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-27-2001).] |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Wow, it's so... TOUCHING!  I love it. Great job! -Leah |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Touching. I liked the blue sky stanza. I know what you go through. I lost my grandpa about 2 years ago and I still think about him. "The heart can think of no devotion |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
that was a great poem! very touching but really sad tho  Luv always Jo xoxo |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
that was a great poem! very touching but really sad tho Luv always Jo xoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here. I enjoyed this one. It's quite touching.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow... very emotional, great work although a very sad topic... I fyou want to talk just mail me... Zu |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
It is never easy losing someone you love, you're right. I hope you can become a stronger person with the memory. You've written quite a lovely poem here. It's something to be proud of. ~AF~ Know what you want. Become your real self. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
you surprised me with the ending...i was jolted for a second... i don't have any wise words but hey, email me when you need a listening ear(or rather a seeing eye) time may not heal wounds but i hope it diminishes some of the pain |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Good poem, the emotions were very stong. I now exactly how you feel... My grandpa passed away about 2 years ago, and whenever I hear a certain song, I just have to listen to it again... He also had a joke that went with that song, so I laugh whenever I hear the song. Anyway, great post, I enjoy your stuff. That one really hit me... Good job. - Cody - |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
You are getting quite good at this, if I might say so myself. Great way of conveying your feelings. That third stanza could have been a little more compacted, tho. The last line of it seems to throw off the rhythm a little. But other than that, this was a very good piece. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
thanks for all of the replies. I really appreciate it. I am trying hard to create something you guys will love...but it's not coming out the way I hoped it would. I always hit a wall at some point... thanks for listening... Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I definitely is hard to lose someone we dearly love Hope you start feeling better ~*hugs*~ I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!! |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
*hugs*...the space of a person whom you've lost can never be filled no matter how long ago they may have left.....be happy that you knew such a wonderful person and that they are looking down on you and thinking about you too.. ...wonderful poem stace you do it so well agpfagp!
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