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fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

0 posted 2001-05-25 11:56 PM

hey all, this is an old one but oh well. lol it's a little bit edited...tell me what u think. thaaaaanks!!! -fear-

my heart is heavy
laden with pain
why won't my brain
make this all go away?
why can't my soul
heal,
or just go
leave me be...
to forever rot
in this messed up society.
why was i so stupid
to give you the chance to leave?
i was scared!
aren't i allowed?
or were you just looking for an excuse.
trying to find a way out?
i can't figure out
why this won't go away
leave me be dammit!
to forever rot
in my own personal world of pain.

-fear-

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

1 posted 2001-05-26 12:33 PM

good job on this one...if you life imitates you poem..i'm sorry

take hope in the fact that life goes on through the hurt and your heart will heal. very nice job getting the emotion to the reader..

me

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-05-26 01:02 AM

such bitterness and anger...i felt the situation...hope things turn out better

...and good job and this was quite a enjoyable read...thanks for shraing and keepw riting...

...?

ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!!

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-05-26 12:37 PM

This is called shooting from the hip and it is great.

Raw emotions make the best pieces as you have demonstrated here. Try not to stick in that world of pain too long though. It's not a pleasent place after a while.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-26 08:24 PM

I liked this one. Sounds like you were going through a trying time and I hope things are better.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Poet on Acid
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

5 posted 2001-05-27 11:05 PM

Damn

"It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶ØÊ†<

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

6 posted 2001-06-01 01:33 AM

damn me?? :-( haha already been done

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-06-05 11:00 PM

ooooo very dark! I liked it

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

8 posted 2001-06-08 03:02 AM

YAAAAAY! lol thanks ppl =)
-bergundy-

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