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luvnkris
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since 2000-08-31
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Perth, Australia

0 posted 2001-05-25 11:30 PM



A Tomorrow Without Me


If tomorrow starts without me
Please don’t let me see
How alone and frustrated you are &
All those tears you shed for me

Don’t think of all the things
We never got to say
Instead remember the love we shared
Each and every day

I know it seems unfair
But there’s nothing we can do
Last night an angel came to me
And took me away from you

The angel told me not to cry
My place above was ready
But I’d have to leave those I love behind
And hold my head high and steady

When tomorrow starts without me
Please try to understand
I don’t want you to be sad or angry
Just remember the touch of my hand

Believe me I didn’t want to die
I want to stay with you
We spent our whole lives together
Growing old, me and you

As I turned and walked away
The tears fell from my eyes
I always joked I’d be the first
The first of us that dies

But now that it has happened
And we’re separated for now
It seems so impossible
So unfair, so foul

If I had know that yesterday was to be my last
I still wouldn’t have changed a thing
We fell asleep in each others arms
So much joy to me that does bring

I got to say I love you
I got to give you a kiss
The last thing I saw before I left
Was a smile on your face, pure bliss

As I walk through heaven’s gates
And look up at our great God
He tells me soon we’ll be together again
And gives me a loving nod

Now don’t forget I’m watching
Over everything you do
And when you think I’m far away
Remember I’m right there with you

So when tomorrow starts without me
And you have to lead your life
Remember all the things I brought you…
From your ever loving Wife

* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



© Copyright 2001 Jo - All Rights Reserved
fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
1 posted 2001-05-25 11:59 PM


wow..i liked this a lot.  incredibly depressing though.  i dunno which was my favorite stanza.  they were all good.  you should be proud of this poem.  good work.
-fear-

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 791
obscured vision
2 posted 2001-05-26 12:53 PM


Amazing story you told. this is going to my library. great job.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

Just leave me alone and give me some space.

anonymous albert ?
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3 posted 2001-05-26 12:59 PM


sad...yet so beautiful...im glad you posting again...i havent seen your poetry for a while anyways...this one was quite well written...awesome job...the stiry telling etc...everything was wonderful...thansk for sharing and hope to see more... ...?

ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!!

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17
Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada
4 posted 2001-05-26 02:55 AM


All I can say is WOW!
this poem made me think about death because I am very sick with kidney failure.  I know I wouldn't want to not wake up the next morning but there is always that chance and it's very frightning

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

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since 2000-08-30
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5 posted 2001-05-26 06:45 PM


This was well done. I really thought this rocked. Extremely well done. Possibly one of my favs from you hehe. I know it's one of the best  
I hope to see you contribute more of your poems on a regular basis.
Once again, well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ski*Chick
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since 2001-01-13
Posts 141
Fitchburg, Mass, Usa
6 posted 2001-05-26 06:50 PM


That was really good poem, it was sad. But think positive,   Minna  

Learning how to walk, Learning how to talk, are the hardest thing to do in a baby life. Learning how to walk for me is the hardest thing to do.

luvnkris
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since 2000-08-31
Posts 144
Perth, Australia
7 posted 2001-05-27 05:08 AM


Thanks for the reply's!
i havn't had a chance to come on here for quite a while, but that doesn't mean i havn't been writing!
thanks for the positivness... i really apprecitate it!  
Luv always Jo
xoxoxo

* never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you*



anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
8 posted 2001-05-27 07:09 AM


This is so totally awesome! The way you placed yourself in someone elses shoes shows just how much talent you have.

Well done!  

~AF~

"I'm not a slave to a God that doesn't exist."
Manson - The Fight Song

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 495
East Haddam, CT
9 posted 2001-05-27 12:14 PM


This was soooooooooo sad, but I loved it alot alot alot!!! Great work, this is going in my library for sure!!

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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