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A Tomorrow without Me
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A Tomorrow without Me |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia 
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A Tomorrow Without Me If tomorrow starts without me Please don’t let me see How alone and frustrated you are & All those tears you shed for me Don’t think of all the things We never got to say Instead remember the love we shared Each and every day I know it seems unfair But there’s nothing we can do Last night an angel came to me And took me away from you The angel told me not to cry My place above was ready But I’d have to leave those I love behind And hold my head high and steady When tomorrow starts without me Please try to understand I don’t want you to be sad or angry Just remember the touch of my hand Believe me I didn’t want to die I want to stay with you We spent our whole lives together Growing old, me and you As I turned and walked away The tears fell from my eyes I always joked I’d be the first The first of us that dies But now that it has happened And we’re separated for now It seems so impossible So unfair, so foul If I had know that yesterday was to be my last I still wouldn’t have changed a thing We fell asleep in each others arms So much joy to me that does bring I got to say I love you I got to give you a kiss The last thing I saw before I left Was a smile on your face, pure bliss As I walk through heaven’s gates And look up at our great God He tells me soon we’ll be together again And gives me a loving nod Now don’t forget I’m watching Over everything you do And when you think I’m far away Remember I’m right there with you So when tomorrow starts without me And you have to lead your life Remember all the things I brought you… From your ever loving Wife * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
wow..i liked this a lot. incredibly depressing though. i dunno which was my favorite stanza. they were all good. you should be proud of this poem. good work. -fear- |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
Amazing story you told. this is going to my library. great job. tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sad...yet so beautiful...im glad you posting again...i havent seen your poetry for a while anyways...this one was quite well written...awesome job...the stiry telling etc...everything was wonderful...thansk for sharing and hope to see more...  ...?ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!! |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
All I can say is WOW! this poem made me think about death because I am very sick with kidney failure. I know I wouldn't want to not wake up the next morning but there is always that chance and it's very frightning Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was well done. I really thought this rocked. Extremely well done. Possibly one of my favs from you hehe. I know it's one of the best  I hope to see you contribute more of your poems on a regular basis. Once again, well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
That was really good poem, it was sad. But think positive,  Minna Learning how to walk, Learning how to talk, are the hardest thing to do in a baby life. Learning how to walk for me is the hardest thing to do. |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
Thanks for the reply's! i havn't had a chance to come on here for quite a while, but that doesn't mean i havn't been writing! thanks for the positivness... i really apprecitate it!  Luv always Jo xoxoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is so totally awesome! The way you placed yourself in someone elses shoes shows just how much talent you have. Well done! ~AF~ "I'm not a slave to a God that doesn't exist." |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This was soooooooooo sad, but I loved it alot alot alot!!! Great work, this is going in my library for sure!! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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