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HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

0 posted 2001-05-24 06:16 PM

I stand back to look at you,
And I slowly start to cry.
Tears are pouring down my cheeks,
You look at me and sigh.

"What the hell is wrong with you?"
You would look at me and say,
"What did I do wrong now?"
For I cryed almost everyday.

"You know that I Can't be with you,"
AAAHHH! The excueses that you make.
Why do you have to lie to me?
You are always so damn fake.

You wonder why I cry so much?
Why am I in so much pain?
Because I always run to you,
although there is nothing to gain.

So then I go home,
And I cry in the rain.
So no one can see,
TO hide the tears and the pain.

I sit here for hours,
Just waiting by the phone.
But you never call me
So I stay home alone.

You give so many reasons,
And so many lies.
Of why you can't be with me,
Do you enjoy watching me cry?

You say someday,
But your friend tells me never.
But still I stay and wait,
To observe my pointless indever.

So What's it going to be?
Choose right now, her or me?
For if you choose her,
I will let you two be.

But just answer my one question,
And please just answer now,
I want to know why you lead me on?
I want to know why, and how?

Was it that you knew you could?
Did you know I'd fall for you?
Did you know that I would beleive
Everything that you say and do.

Will now that I know,
I don't beleive you anymore.
You took the richness of my heart,
And left me dry and poor.

But it does not matter,
For i know that one day.
Some other girl will do it to you,
And what a price you'll pay.

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

1 posted 2001-05-24 06:22 PM

Sorry I forgot to put my little message at the bottom

This is the poem that I wrote for a guy named Joel. We became very good friends and then became more but when I really started to like him more than friends he told me about another gurl he had feelings for and this is what I gave to him to show him how I felt

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-05-24 06:40 PM

well...u did a very good job on protraying that feelings...and its a situation...so much bitter and sadness aint it?...it must be hard but...i hope everything works out the best for u...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

3 posted 2001-05-24 06:43 PM

Hey anonomous albert
why do you have to be so anonomous?
i want to know who you are!
Thanks for reading alomst every one
of my poems, and replying to them

im glad to see i have someone behind me
knowing how i feel
lotsa love
Ashley

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

4 posted 2001-05-24 08:13 PM

I really want people to read this poem for i think it's one of my best

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-05-25 03:40 AM

Well done here on the poem. Don't worry people will get to it, it's just really late at nihgt.
I liked the poem and it was very powerful.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

6 posted 2001-05-25 11:56 AM

This was very good, and I really liked it, but I'm sorry that you had to go through such a painful situation in order to produce this poem. Hope things are good for you, and remember that this dude is gonna get back what he did 2 u someday.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

7 posted 2001-05-25 12:12 PM

very very very well done with this poem....you portrayed your feelings very well...i know of a close close friend who can relate to this poem....thank you for the read!....im sure you're right about his paying in the end!!...kick his ass girl!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

8 posted 2001-05-25 01:22 PM

All I can really say is WOW that rocked I know how that feels basically I was in that situation with a girl recently she ditched me for her ex-boyfriend like last july and then we got together again and it happened all over again, I totaly understand those feelings, and as you say this one may just go in my library

later

The Rescue

what if the invisible man could be seen would he still be treated so mean
would he live a life of pain
or would he be driven insane

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

9 posted 2001-05-25 01:26 PM

ps this is the first poem to go in my library

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

10 posted 2001-05-25 01:39 PM

ummm ok nice poem i guess.
robin

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

11 posted 2001-05-25 04:37 PM

i'm addicted!!...ahhhh

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-25-2001).]

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

12 posted 2001-05-25 05:54 PM

Thanks for all the feedback
it really made me feel a lot better

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

anonymous albert ?

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13 posted 2001-05-26 02:45 AM

whats a feedback?

...hehe..but hey!...your welcome!

...and i appreciate the fact you acknowledge my replys... thanks...and see you around

ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!!

anonymous albert ?

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14 posted 2001-05-26 02:49 AM

oops!

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-26-2001).]

Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

15 posted 2001-05-26 05:19 AM

LOL that ALbert is goofy.

But anyways your poem is amazing! Let that guy get what he deserves whether its now or later either way hes gonna get his! Good job on the poem. I hope to see more of your work soon.

"If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend."

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

16 posted 2001-05-26 11:49 PM

hey,
whoa you actually GAVE this to him?? that took guts if you did, and i'm impressed. this was a great poem, i think pretty much everybody can relate to it. thanks for sharing :-)
-fear-

katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

17 posted 2001-05-27 12:11 PM

This is so good! WOW!!!!! I think some of the best poetry is written in pain.
As for the guy giving him the poem shows guts. How did he react? Forget him he's not worth it if he's going to treat you that way.
keep it up.
katie

We all make mistakes. We all cause others pain. DEAL

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