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Pursuit of a Doubt (2)
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Pursuit of a Doubt (2) |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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Pursuit of a Doubt(2) Open vistas of majestic beauty Shall turn to mud sometimes When tears do fall Crying to me please I-- Sobbing alone always always Allow me to kiss your cheeks Of salty pleasure Estranged among meadows Leaves of grass betray you to an Open Sky And covers you when it rains Though the night seems long You'll never push your leaves Until your time tells To part For existence Yonder she sits alone crying into a cup So that she may taketh that grail and drink up And none shall share "The heart can think of no devotion |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
written very well..i liekd this one as well...the imagery in this poem was graet and the last verses were powerful also...great work here!...hope tos ee more...  ...?ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!! |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
sobbing alone always always. that part got to me. thanks for the great read :-) -fear- |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done, but in my eyes not as good as the first. I still liked it though.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I actually liked this one a lot better than the first one. It seemed to have tons more emotion in it. Well done.  ~AF~ "I'm not a slave to a God that doesn't exist." |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I really like the way that you closed the piece with the lines in italics. Great work here!! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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