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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-05-26 04:14 AM



This is the first of an 11 part series. This of course is not about me but about a fictional girl of my own making. But however real or unreal this may be it's a story that must be told to all that will listen.

There once was a child
chosen to be
the most tormented and hated
This is what was to be
Soon the child grew older
torment she knew well
Then she finally realized
her life was a living hell
Now she struggles on
being beaten everyday
Knowing this pain would never leave
This was no one special
after all
this no one was me

There will be more to follow, the series is complete I need only post them. Most likely I'll do 2 at a time.

"It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ<

© Copyright 2001 Tony Ryan Johnson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-26 08:09 AM


a pretty good introduction that makes me curious and interested...all sorts of questions are running through my mind now...

i guess i will read on

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2 posted 2001-05-26 11:41 AM


Ah, another series writer!  

Well, this is a great introduction to your series. It seems like it's going to be a sad but realistic series. This piece is very well-written, and I can't wait to see the rest! Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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3 posted 2001-05-26 03:48 PM


very powerful piece...i really liked the emotions...the came to me as soo real...this is a sad...as girl that lives in a reality of sincere blameless pain...just sad...thanks for sharing and hope to see more... ...?

ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!!


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Deranger
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4 posted 2001-05-26 05:54 PM


Yes...it baits, it interests...it addicts.  Everything an introduction should do.  

Bravo!

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

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5 posted 2001-05-26 08:54 PM


Well done and I'm looking forward to the rest.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
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6 posted 2001-05-27 07:56 AM


Great! Another series!!  

From what I have read here, many more fantastic pieces are to follow.

The eyes will be kept open.  

~AF~

"I'm not a slave to a God that doesn't exist."
Manson - The Fight Song

vixengrl04
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7 posted 2001-05-27 11:52 AM


This was successful in getting my attention, so I will most definitely read the ones to follow!!!  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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