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Godsend_1
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0 posted 2001-05-25 09:55 PM



i had this up as a status yesterday on yahoo and i thought i should post this so ppl new wut i meant lol i wrote this like 4 days ago enjoyo!!!!
ben redshaw the great out.

Existence is futile
Is what I hear them say
Existence is futile
I never bothered living anyway
Existence is futile
Why ever say that

Life is grand a gift from above
Life, love, turmoil
Treasures not meant to be scorned

Turmoil you say
A gift or a treasure
Never and no way

But think and ponder and understand
Turmoil is actually a friend
It hurt yes and makes you yell

Hey come on now
Think of how strong you are
Skin so tough you look like a rhino

A person mocks you
You block the evil shot
And protect your heart

You are tough
A man among men
A woman among women

The one that only
That can fight for yourself

So go fight
And praise life
And forever know

Existence isn’t futile

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it
to make the world the greatest place is the perfect dream in

© Copyright 2001 Ben Redshaw - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-25 10:02 PM


i really liked this one...the meaning behind this poem was great...and youw rote it nicely...thansk for sharing it and keep writing... ...?

ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!!

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2 posted 2001-05-26 12:51 PM


great poem ben!
robin

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

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3 posted 2001-05-26 01:26 AM


hey,
this was cool! these days people get carried away in damning life, and just take it for granted.  your poem has a good message that life is a precious gift that should be embraced and not hated.  it's good to know there are optimistic like you :-) thanks for sharing this poem.
-fear-

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4 posted 2001-05-26 07:21 AM


the title pulled me in and i liked the way how you showed us your sense of humour while trying to deliver such an important message...
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5 posted 2001-05-26 08:11 PM


Not your best poem, but still a good read.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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